Some people believe that spending time away from people we care about helps us improve our relationship with them, because being away from these people makes us realize how important they are to us. Other people believe that to improve our relationships with the people we care about, we should spend as much time with them as possible, because spending time apart can damage or harm a relationship. Which
view do you agree with and why?
Nowadays, there is a lot debate between people about how to improve their relationship with each other. In my opinion, there more people spend their time with each other, the better they would be able to strengthen their relationship or friendship. I feel this way for two convincing reasons, which be discussed in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, spending a great deal of time with people enables them to know each other better and also help each other in a wide variety of circumstances. As matter of fact, when people spending their time with each other, they share many information and things, which allow them to identify their personality. This certainly would be useful over a long term, because they can count on each other when they have trouble. However, how they can get familiar with each other if they see others barely. An example will illustrate this viewpoint much better. When I was at university, I spent most of leisure time with my friends. One day, my mother called me and told that “ my grandfather passed away”. I was really sad and started crying. After that, my friend supported my emotionally and during that time I could not participate in any courses, but my friend helped me to learn lessons without any problems. For this, had my friend been apart, I would not have had anyone to support me such that?After that incident our friendship have been cemented more.
Furthermore, it is established beyond that on the one hand some people believe that if people spend their with each other, conflicts will be increased, yet on the other hand, others believe that it causes that they have more pleasure time, which make their relationship more strong, because people normally like to spend their time with people making them more happy. I firmly agree with the latter view point, for I believe that the more people hang out with their friends or others, the more they can prevent their relationship from damages. By way of illustration, a recent study conducted by Tarbiat Modares University reveals that the people who visit seldom each other damage their relationship easily because there are not happy, which causes conflict among them.
To wrap it up, according to the above-aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that if people spend their time others on a regular basis, they have a better relationship, as in the first place, they can support each other at various condition, as in the second place, they create more pleasure time, all of which bonded their relationship hard.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, really, second, so, then, i feel, in my opinion, to begin with, in the first place, in the second place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2111.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 427.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94379391101 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60780168553 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510538641686 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 633.6 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 90.219839155 48.9658058833 184% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.176470588 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1176470588 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.76470588235 5.45110844103 179% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.331029550719 0.236089414692 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113045457679 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0959342699281 0.0737576698707 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226971855611 0.150856017488 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0634458065912 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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