Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to s

Yes, I agree with statement that says today's they are more busy with work than spending time with their kids. And they can use the time doing together with their kids than to playing games. To support my statements i want to explore the the negative aspect of not spending time with their kids.

Firstly, parents are first teacher for their kids in world, they are one who initiating learning steps to the children, there after the schoolteacher take over that task and peer group are the best environment for the learning process. Best impression is the best impression best impression like parent primary resources for teaching morals,knowledge and so on. if they are doing their part good then the remaining things goes smoothly without any external disturbances. So the parents are supposed to be spend time with their kids.

Secondly, earlier only the male use to go for run the house and the whole family dependent on him, so the mother take care the part of spending time with the children but in this modern world both of them working, so who will take of the children and spend the times for kids. If they are difficulty to find the time then schedule table at on the week ends make get together party like going the some hotels, parks and theatres. That way parents can spend more time your kid, your kids also happy and you also reduce your mental stress.

Thirdly, previously there lot of kids in the families but now a day's most of them having one or two child only, there is no hope for spending time with siblings, earlier larger family having more kids and they use to play with each other like a team. Lack parents attentions leads to some sort of physical,mental and social problems. So parents should spend time with their children or at least try to be them. That gives great emotional and psychological supports to the children.

Finally, when parents spending their best time to have fun and playing sports with gives some sort of physical closeness and improves the health as well as but more than that if your going out with your together gives the chance to the children to share happiness and their sorrows with you. This movement gives you great chance to understand your children and to determine what is there need.

The conclusion is that even though sport activities bind you with your children, still benefits are more when you are doing things together with your kids, so I believe that it is best to use that time doing things together with their children.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'third', 'thirdly', 'well', 'at least', 'sort of', 'as well as']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.250517598344 0.229887763892 109% => OK
Verbs: 0.144927536232 0.158761421928 91% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0683229813665 0.0866891130778 79% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0538302277433 0.046263068375 116% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0766045548654 0.0685040099705 112% => OK
Prepositions: 0.126293995859 0.118717715034 106% => OK
Participles: 0.0393374741201 0.0351676179071 112% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.36906211633 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0351966873706 0.0309702414327 114% => OK
Particles: 0.00207039337474 0.00188951952338 110% => OK
Determiners: 0.0869565217391 0.0887237588012 98% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00828157349896 0.0209618222197 40% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0124223602484 0.0139019557991 89% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2555.0 2387.08602151 107% => OK
No of words: 439.0 408.028673835 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.82004555809 5.86048508987 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48200974243 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.25284738041 0.338922669872 75% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.200455580866 0.251872472559 80% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.157175398633 0.174417080927 90% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0797266514806 0.112833075102 71% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36906211633 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466970387244 0.524397521467 89% => OK
Word variations: 51.5992130558 59.2087087015 87% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6684587814 82% => OK
Sentence length: 25.8235294118 20.5533526081 126% => OK
Sentence length SD: 80.4995647864 48.84282405 165% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.294117647 120.699889404 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8235294118 20.5533526081 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.644075263715 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.5376344086 132% => OK
Language errors: 23.0 5.54480286738 415% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 45.8690874983 45.7405998639 100% => OK
Elegance: 1.51127819549 1.45489161554 104% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.489379255388 0.300154397459 163% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.135199111131 0.103427244359 131% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0829099635729 0.0752933317313 110% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.608664526165 0.497263757937 122% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.193191840205 0.151897553556 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.201596403142 0.114077575197 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.096613247329 0.0781384742642 124% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.3741579335 0.336927656856 111% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.049150845053 0.067059652881 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.329902218108 0.210909579961 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0776091569571 0.0618886996521 125% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8870967742 109% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 8.42114695341 142% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.6433691756 117% => OK

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Rates: 70 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21 Out of 30