Some people have ambitious dreams and keep following them, but other people always
focus on realistic goals and try to achieve them. Which do you think is better?
In today's convoluted and competitive world, it becomes highly charged and a hot debatable topic whether people should try for realistic targets or have dreams and chase them to fulfill. Therefore, some people are leading the proponent the claim of that having dreams motivate people to reach them. However, others may take an opposite point of view and believe that people cannot reach their goals until they try for them. If I have to face these two choices, I tend to choose the latter idea. There are some reasons, the most outstanding of which will be discussed in the ensuing paragraphs.
To begin with, were are living in an era that everything is changing enormously. To elaborate on, based on the current circumstances, no one can foresee the future. Hence, in order to avoid unpredictable things, people should make a realistic plan for their lives and seek for some ways to achieve them. Among myriad of elements which enable people to reach the targets of their plan, studying would be a dependable way. Let me give you an example might make this viewpoint much more evident. When my father was a young man, he made a long-term plan for his life. One of the important goals of him was that pursue his study until getting a degree in medicine. He tried hard and finally after 15 years, he became a doctor. For this reason, he could not reach his targets, if he was a dream.
Apart from being organized, the second debatable point is that on the one hand, some people believe that accumulating experience to achieve their goals takes a great deal of people's time and finally a bunch of their time will be wasted. On the other hand, some others believe that by having goals and trying for them, they are allowed to become prosperous in their lives due to the fact that they can accumulate valuable experience by having big efforts for each goal. I take the former viewpoint with a pinch of salt and claim that the latter viewpoint is much closer to the reality, for I do believe that not only they cannot waste their time during earning experience, but also they can become familiar with a wide variety facet of lives based on their effort. As a result, the more people try for their realistic goals, the more they have a chance to reach their goals.
To wrap it up, by considering all aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes the importance of trying for rational goals on reaching them inasmuch as in the first place they are able to have a plan in order to achieve success and in the second place by trying for everything they obtain precious experiences which make this way convenient.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 16, Rule ID: WERE_VBB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'where' or 'we'?
Suggestion: where; we
...e ensuing paragraphs. To begin with, were are living in an era that everything is...
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Line 7, column 340, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...riences which make this way convenient.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, apart from, as a result, to begin with, in the first place, in the second place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2150.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 460.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67391304348 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43235904225 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502173913043 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 670.5 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.9626297758 48.9658058833 163% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.157894737 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2105263158 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.10526315789 5.45110844103 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297745031967 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0965372476927 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0902891087528 0.0737576698707 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20467566746 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0962135991905 0.0645574589148 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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