Some people think that advertising aimed at children should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Business and business activities widely accepted as important factors in determining whether mankind thrive or not. Consideration of them should have the highest priorities. One possible way for companies and merchants to offer their products to people is through advertisements. But this issue is different for children. There is an apparent discrepancy among different people regarding whether advertising directly for children is suitable or not.
The opponents of the idea of advertising for children most importantly assert that kids cannot distinguish the quality of different products or the fact that if that product is suitable for them and companies by doing so can easily take advantage of those young children. There are a number of fact indicating that this position is right. By way of illustration, consider huge amounts of advertisements which are on air these days. All of them want to sell their toys to children and make children think that their product is essential for them and in of a high quality. Kids simply cannot decide or find out whether their claims are true or not.
Moreover, the adversaries of the idea stated above maintain that in addition to immaturity problems, there are some other demerit that these ads can treat children. These opponents hold firmly to the belief that if parents encourage their children by buying those advertised products, they will put their kids in a great danger. The reason is that those kids will want more products because every day more of them will introduce through advertisement channels. As a result, those children will be impossible to satisfy and that harms the kids themselves since no one can always get what he/she wants.
However the endorsers of the idea of advertising for children argue that this idea is unique, providing the children to know what they want by eliminating any possible and useless connection between them. They claim that new researches revealed that children are capable of their own choice and they can pick what they wants. For instance kids by watching these ads on TV can decide what toys they want to pay with and as a result they will be more satisfied.
To put the issue into perspective, the ability to choose, although enabling children to express their true desire, does not merit the disadvantages of this aspect. It is therefore clear that the mental health and usefulness of the product for kids should be given foremost consideration. This concern is more acute than the apprehension that children pick their own product influence by advertising.
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...maturity problems, there are some other demerit that these ads can treat children. Thes...
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...ne can always get what he/she wants. However the endorsers of the idea of advertisin...
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Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'want'
Suggestion: want
... own choice and they can pick what they wants. For instance kids by watching these ad...
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...r own product influence by advertising.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'regarding', 'so', 'therefore', 'for instance', 'in addition', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.238938053097 0.229887763892 104% => OK
Verbs: 0.154867256637 0.158761421928 98% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0752212389381 0.0866891130778 87% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0442477876106 0.046263068375 96% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0530973451327 0.0685040099705 78% => OK
Prepositions: 0.157079646018 0.118717715034 132% => OK
Participles: 0.0243362831858 0.0351676179071 69% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.75679583363 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0265486725664 0.0309702414327 86% => OK
Particles: 0.00221238938053 0.00188951952338 117% => OK
Determiners: 0.0973451327434 0.0887237588012 110% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0309734513274 0.0209618222197 148% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0110619469027 0.0139019557991 80% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2575.0 2387.08602151 108% => OK
No of words: 421.0 408.028673835 103% => OK
Chars per words: 6.11638954869 5.86048508987 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.353919239905 0.338922669872 104% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.285035629454 0.251872472559 113% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.211401425178 0.174417080927 121% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.130641330166 0.112833075102 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75679583363 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491686460808 0.524397521467 94% => OK
Word variations: 54.3989605953 59.2087087015 92% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6684587814 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.05 20.5533526081 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.8336502722 48.84282405 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.75 120.699889404 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.05 20.5533526081 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.644075263715 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 49.5535629454 45.7405998639 108% => OK
Elegance: 1.66666666667 1.45489161554 115% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191580043589 0.300154397459 64% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.117923167447 0.103427244359 114% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.073489905709 0.0752933317313 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.52224650827 0.497263757937 105% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.137694315128 0.151897553556 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0766909345135 0.114077575197 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0367074890524 0.0781384742642 47% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.376491100703 0.336927656856 112% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0445759292974 0.067059652881 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13169610586 0.210909579961 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00555330664461 0.0618886996521 9% => Paragraphs are similar to each other.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 8.42114695341 107% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.6433691756 117% => OK
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Rates: 77 out of 100
Scores by essay E-rater: 23 Out of 30