Some people think that governments should spend as much money as possible on developing or buying computer technology. Other people disagree and think that this money should be spent on more basic needs. Which one of these opinions do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
Nowadays, all people want to make the world better. Some people think that governments should spend as much money as possible on developing or buying computer technology. On the other hand, some people think that this money should be spent on more basic needs. I, however, think that the government should use this money to improve more basic needs because there are many urgent problems right now, such as pollution, transportation, and poor people.
Firstly, the polluting environment is a big concern with the government and all people in the earth. If the environment becomes more and more contaminated, we will have to live with the dusty air and the polluted water or polluted rivers. Therefore, we will be able to suffer from many dangerous diseases, especially cancer. In addition, it can be a cause of many viruses, which can shorten our life. Furthermore, even many animals living on the earth, so if the environment is polluted, many animal species will not have a place to live. As a result, plenty of animal species will be dying or will be listed in the red book.
Secondly, equally important for people is the transportation. For example, in Ha Noi, our capital, it always has traffic jams, even there is not at the rush hours. The public transportation in my country is in the poor preformation. Some people cannot go to work on time; as a consequence, they do not catch the regular bus. In addition, in some countries, many bridges have cracks and highways buckle have made the accidents happen more and more often.
Finally, as you know, many the poor people have to live in the worst condition in some country. Some people have to stay in the slums or they do not have a place to live. Besides, some kids cannot go to school or they have to go a far and dangerous distance to reach to the school. I assume that the governments should donate much money to build up their life.
In conclusion, I believe that if the government put as much money as possible on more basic needs, people in around the world can have a wonderful life. They need to be satisfied with their basic needs before they need the development of the technology.
Discourse Markers used:
['besides', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'therefore', 'for example', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'you know', 'as a result', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.214780600462 0.229887763892 93% => OK
Verbs: 0.150115473441 0.158761421928 95% => OK
Adjectives: 0.094688221709 0.0866891130778 109% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0577367205543 0.046263068375 125% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0415704387991 0.0685040099705 61% => OK
Prepositions: 0.110854503464 0.118717715034 93% => OK
Participles: 0.0230946882217 0.0351676179071 66% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.64164459077 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0346420323326 0.0309702414327 112% => OK
Particles: 0.00230946882217 0.00188951952338 122% => OK
Determiners: 0.10623556582 0.0887237588012 120% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0323325635104 0.0209618222197 154% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00230946882217 0.0139019557991 17% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2153.0 2387.08602151 90% => OK
No of words: 379.0 408.028673835 93% => OK
Chars per words: 5.68073878628 5.86048508987 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48200974243 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.298153034301 0.338922669872 88% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.195250659631 0.251872472559 78% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.142480211082 0.174417080927 82% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.100263852243 0.112833075102 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64164459077 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480211081794 0.524397521467 92% => OK
Word variations: 50.9723820354 59.2087087015 86% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6684587814 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0476190476 20.5533526081 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.3100063129 48.84282405 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.523809524 120.699889404 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0476190476 20.5533526081 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.857142857143 0.644075263715 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.54480286738 0% => OK
Readability: 37.5726850107 45.7405998639 82% => OK
Elegance: 1.39814814815 1.45489161554 96% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.3107698426 0.300154397459 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.151297650786 0.103427244359 146% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.103666183546 0.0752933317313 138% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.541434698652 0.497263757937 109% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.13596461319 0.151897553556 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136883611808 0.114077575197 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.168896025787 0.0781384742642 216% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.330157414911 0.336927656856 98% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0745288404629 0.067059652881 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23884804075 0.210909579961 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.203705833987 0.0618886996521 329% => Less connections among paragraphs
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8870967742 50% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.86379928315 207% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.91756272401 142% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 8.42114695341 59% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 2.4623655914 284% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.75985663082 217% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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