Some people think that success is most important in their life. Others think that it’s more important to be happy when they fail. Which idea do you agree with and why?
Every people have many objects in their life, and they put effort into achieving this objects. But sometimes objects are not easily achievable and people must endure many problems and fails in the path of their objects. Although some people are of the opinion that success is most important in their life, I support a contradictory view. As far as I am concerned, the biggest success for humans is that learn many things from their fails and do not disappointed or depressed. There are numerous reasons for this view, two of which –that is- some objects are not beneficial for them, and fails are the bases of triumph, are the most outstanding ones elaborated hereunder.
To begin with, the most striking reason why I believe humans should not be disappointed in their fails is the fact that sometimes over objects are not beneficial for us and god do not want we achieve these objects. therefore, in my opinion, people must do their best and do not be depressed if they fail. By this believe they can also release their stresses and anxieties. For example, I remember when I was preparing for master science exam, a very big problem came to me, and so I could not get good scores in my exam. At that time I put effort into preparing myself for next year exam rather than be depressed. As a result in the next year exam, I got very good scores, where I believe at first exam I could not get even if that problem did not come to me.
Another equally important point is that fails are the bases of victories. Undeniably after each fail, people obtain many worthwhile experiences and they can enjoy those in order to achieve their objects. I remember a story about one of our legends who failed in a big war and many of his soldiers was died. At that time he was very disappointed. He leaned back to a rock and watched an ant that put its effort into climbing a right wall. The ant felled down each time, but it did not relinquish. It does more and more and eventually could climb from the wall. Our legend learned a very big lesson from that ant. He prepared his armies another time and eventually could win the war.
All in all, with all this taken into account, although some people believe that they must be successful in all of her life, in my opinion, humans, in order to achieve their objects, not only do not they be disappointed in fails but also they should learn lessons from this experience.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: EACH_EVERY_NNS[1]
Message: 'Each' and 'every' are used with singular. Did you mean 'all'?
Suggestion: All
Every people have many objects in their life,...
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Line 3, column 216, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...d do not want we achieve these objects. therefore, in my opinion, people must do their be...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, therefore, while, for example, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1977.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 437.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52402745995 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4086143875 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466819221968 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 614.7 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.6426976391 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.1428571429 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8095238095 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257148960906 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0780926867219 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0776552025329 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164161437214 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.056512894236 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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