some people think that we should keep away from others to improve our relationship because being away from people reminds us of how important they are. Others think we should always stay with others to have a good relationship because we can communicate with them more often. What do you think?
In today's convoluted and competitive world, it becomes a highly charged and hot debatable topic whether in order to have a good relationship people should keep in touch in tandem or keep away from others. Therefore, some people are the leading proponent of the claims that in order to avoid some common problems and conflict, it is better to keep away from others. However, others may take an opposite point of view and believe that staying with friends leads a good relationship. If I have to face these two choices, I tend to choose the latter idea. In what follows, I will pinpoint the most irrefutable reasons.
The first reason why I agree with it is that by staying with friends, people are enabled cement their relationship. To elaborate on, by being close in tandem, people are allowed to get familiar with each other's personality and try to evaluate all positive and negative accept of them. Accordingly, after finding some weaknesses and strengths, they know that they should eliminate the defects and boost the positive facets. In contrast, if they keep away from their others, how they can figure out these significant things, what is worse, they cannot find their friends’ problems resulting in their friends stay alone to solve their problems. For example, when my mother died, I needed to talk with my friends to subside my sorrows, but my friends were not near to me, and then, that event was really painful to me. For this reason, had my friends stayed with me in my predicament situation, I would not have endured the weight of that sadness on my shoulder. As a result, human beings are able to help each other when they stay near to each other resulting in making their relationship strengthen.
Apart from cementing a relationship, the second debatable point is that some people believe that when people spend more time with each other, it is possible that it gives rise to conflict among them because of having a monotonic and tedious relationship for a long time. However, others believe that people are able to recover themselves mentally and physically by hanging out with each other. Hence, I take the former viewpoint with a pinch of salt and claim that the latter viewpoint is much closer to the reality, for I do believe that the more people spend their time with each other, the more they are allowed to release their stress and tension stemming from the daily overwhelming activities such as assignments, tasks, work and so on. Furthemore, according to the survey conducted by the University of Tehran, those friends who keep in touch with each other are more happy and successful owing to having a good relationship which enables them to recover themselves after a stressful and boring day of schools or job. Consequently, by hanging out with each other’s, people are permitted to keep away what derives from their staggering tasks.
To wrap it up, given the importance of making a good relationship and releasing stress, one soon realizes the positive importance of bring near of our friends inasmuch as in the first place, they are able to enrich their relationship by helping each other, as in the second place they are able to relieve their stress which helps them to be happy.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 205, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'others'' or 'other's'?
Suggestion: others'; other's
...e are allowed to get familiar with each others personality and try to evaluate all pos...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, may, really, second, so, then, therefore, apart from, for example, in contrast, such as, as a result, in the first place, in the second place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 88.0 52.1666666667 169% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2679.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 551.0 407.700716846 135% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86206896552 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84493438435 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61316544334 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480943738657 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 812.7 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 82.6410503919 48.9658058833 169% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.833333333 100.406767564 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.6111111111 20.6045352989 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1111111111 5.45110844103 204% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.344993855276 0.236089414692 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119843107327 0.076458572812 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0666895829865 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219513008451 0.150856017488 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0560066350791 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 11.7677419355 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.5 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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