Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Parents always play an important role in their children's lives. Therefore, some young adults would rather live with their families for a longer time. On the other hand, some people want to be independent of their parents. Personally, I am of the latter opinion. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, it will be much easier for a young adult to be successful in life if he learns to be independent at a young age. When a child decides not to rely so much on his parents, it means that he wants to take control of his own life and he knows what he wants his life to be exactly. He is more persistent to pursue his dreams and more prone to success. My brother's experience is a good example to illustrate this. My brother wanted to be more independent of our parents and he didn't want to be their hard burden so when he was eighteen, he decided went studying abroad. Without his parents by his side, he learned to make important decisions on his own and although some of them weren't nothing different from mistakes, he gained a lot of experience and knew how to successfully overcome difficulties. As a result, with some ups and downs, my brother managed to make his dream come true when he was offered a well-paid job at Google. Hadn't it been for all of the hardness of being on himself, he wouldn't have been as successful as he is now.
Furthermore, parents are not always there for us to rely on so we need to get used to being on our owns. Parents are always baffled every day by their jobs and numerous bills they have to pay so it is better for children to be independent of their parents so as to make their lives less stressful. Moreover, many parents are required to work abroad or to go on business trips on a daily basis. Consequently, parents are not always available for children. For example, my parents have to travel a lot due to their jobs' description. As a result, ever since I was a kid, I have had no choice but to be more self-reliant. I was taught to make meals, do laundry, do my homework all by myself so my parents could be more reassured when they weren't home. Although sometimes I feel depressed and lonely because of living alone but eventually, I became more and more mature and it didn't take me too much time to familiarize myself with the life in college.
In conclusion, I truly believe that young adults ought to be independent of their parents. This is because the independence of parents will help children to be more likely to be successful in the future and children do not always have their parents by their sides to count on. In addition, children ought to learn that they are the one responsible for their own lives, not their parents.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 984, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... job at Google. Hadn't it been for all of the hardness of being on himself, he wouldn...
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Line 5, column 257, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...dren to be independent of their parents so as to make their lives less stressful. Moreov...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'therefore', 'well', 'as to', 'for example', 'i feel', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'as a result', 'to begin with', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.170357751278 0.229887763892 74% => OK
Verbs: 0.17206132879 0.158761421928 108% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0800681431005 0.0866891130778 92% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0698466780239 0.046263068375 151% => OK
Pronouns: 0.112436115843 0.0685040099705 164% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.109028960818 0.118717715034 92% => OK
Participles: 0.0204429301533 0.0351676179071 58% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.76740623283 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0562180579216 0.0309702414327 182% => Less infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0545144804089 0.0887237588012 61% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0119250425894 0.0209618222197 57% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0136286201022 0.0139019557991 98% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2789.0 2387.08602151 117% => OK
No of words: 504.0 408.028673835 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.53373015873 5.86048508987 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73813722054 4.48200974243 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.287698412698 0.338922669872 85% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.214285714286 0.251872472559 85% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.150793650794 0.174417080927 86% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0992063492063 0.112833075102 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76740623283 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46626984127 0.524397521467 89% => OK
Word variations: 53.799588075 59.2087087015 91% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6684587814 116% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.5533526081 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.6526673368 48.84282405 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.208333333 120.699889404 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.5533526081 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.666666666667 0.644075263715 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 42.4285714286 45.7405998639 93% => OK
Elegance: 0.846153846154 1.45489161554 58% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.344751962027 0.300154397459 115% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.127920253941 0.103427244359 124% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0657279741529 0.0752933317313 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.495941836978 0.497263757937 100% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.13851097176 0.151897553556 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130837789031 0.114077575197 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0747617099327 0.0781384742642 96% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.393939875403 0.336927656856 117% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.14097213544 0.067059652881 210% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.257388551712 0.210909579961 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.035514209486 0.0618886996521 57% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8870967742 109% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.91756272401 163% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 8.42114695341 107% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.75985663082 217% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.6433691756 125% => OK
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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