Some young children spend a great amount of their time participating in sports. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this.
Undoubtedly, exercise plays an important role in our lives and no one can deny its importance for young children. In my opinion, it is the most significant thing for our survival after water and food and in the following paragraphs, I will try to explain my position more clearly.
First and foremost, exercise is good for our overall health. According to the latest researches which were published in well-known journals, young children who exercise regularly are less prone to mental disorders such as depression and anxiety. Besides, the rate of other ailments like cancer, heart attacks and obesity is significantly lower in athletes. Furthermore, results of experiments have shown that students who participate in sports three hours a day will learn their lessons easily and in a more convenient way. They can benefit from better mood and behave toward others positively and respectfully.
In the second place, participating in sport activities will prepare young children for future events. They will learn how to cooperate with their friends and listen to coach’s advice carefully. Students will compete with their classmates in sport championships so they can learn how to cope with difficulties and become winner. In addition, young children can meet new people and make new friends, if they attend sport matches outside the school and I think it has positive effects on their minds.
Finally, it is important to bear in mind that although exercise has countless advantages for young children, they should spend some time for other useful activities such as studying, participating in social events like concerts, etc. From my point of view, they should manage their time and energy efficiently.
Taking all the aforementioned arguments into account, it can be concluded that spending time for participating in sports has a lot of benefits for young children which I outlined above. But they should not overwhelmed with many sport activities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 207, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'overwhelm'
Suggestion: overwhelm
...h I outlined above. But they should not overwhelmed with many sport activities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, second, so, well, i think, in addition, such as, in my opinion, in the second place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1651.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 312.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29166666667 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86891560962 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605769230769 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.3682439638 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.066666667 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.66666666667 5.45110844103 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193167858097 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0632959987415 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0629660877841 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117122322338 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0626451806462 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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