Some young children spend a great amount of their time practicing sports. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, sports become an essential part of our life. Some young children spend a great amount of their time practicing sports. On the other hand, some other children do not do many exercises and focus too much on their studying. I, however, think that everything has two sides and this problem is not an exception, it has both advantages and disadvantages.
Spending a plenty of time playing sports is really beneficial because it is good for children's health. First of all, By doing exercises regularly, you can prevent many serious diseases such as heart attack, some disease regarding bone or back. Furthermore, when you do your job or study something, you may be suffering from many stress. So that if after the hard day, you relax by attending at some sports, you can feel better and it also reduces your stress at the day. Therefore, you can have a great health. Not only improve your health but also develop many soft skills, for example, collaborate, communicate,etc. For instance, when you practice basketball, you can meet many people and make a lot of new friends who perhaps will help you at your work or your study in the future. You also will be able to work in a group, it can be an excellent way to get used to working with other people at school or at work.
On the other hand, some parents worry about their children that they might neglect their study at school and attend too much at sports. It cannot be denied that playing several sports is totally good, but if children play it too much, it can be the children’s top target. So that kids do not want to put their most attention in their study. For example, I have a friend who really fond of playing soccer and he is very good at that, but in other subjects, he always has poor performance. Then after a year he has to drop out of the school. Thus the adolescent should not play it too much .
In conclusion, I firmly believe that young kids should play sport regular but not too much, just for 2 or 3 hours a day is enough for them. Then, the rest of their time they can use that time to study or read books. So they can both have a great health and concentrate on their study
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'really', 'regarding', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'thus', 'as to', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'first of all', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.21029082774 0.229887763892 91% => OK
Verbs: 0.140939597315 0.158761421928 89% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0782997762864 0.0866891130778 90% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0738255033557 0.046263068375 160% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0939597315436 0.0685040099705 137% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.111856823266 0.118717715034 94% => OK
Participles: 0.0268456375839 0.0351676179071 76% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.42299574643 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0134228187919 0.0309702414327 43% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0715883668904 0.0887237588012 81% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0335570469799 0.0209618222197 160% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0089485458613 0.0139019557991 64% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2159.0 2387.08602151 90% => OK
No of words: 397.0 408.028673835 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43828715365 5.86048508987 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48200974243 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.254408060453 0.338922669872 75% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.181360201511 0.251872472559 72% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.103274559194 0.174417080927 59% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0780856423174 0.112833075102 69% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42299574643 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513853904282 0.524397521467 98% => OK
Word variations: 56.7192086519 59.2087087015 96% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6684587814 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.9047619048 20.5533526081 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.2243306676 48.84282405 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.80952381 120.699889404 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9047619048 20.5533526081 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.952380952381 0.644075263715 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.54480286738 126% => OK
Readability: 37.0407820559 45.7405998639 81% => OK
Elegance: 1.13043478261 1.45489161554 78% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.300706335778 0.300154397459 100% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.122444901869 0.103427244359 118% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.070751423894 0.0752933317313 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.434874053796 0.497263757937 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.108321848251 0.151897553556 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109699567607 0.114077575197 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105455870711 0.0781384742642 135% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.238088763401 0.336927656856 71% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0775847658666 0.067059652881 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220290855473 0.210909579961 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0953570562238 0.0618886996521 154% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.86379928315 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 8.42114695341 107% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.6433691756 103% => OK
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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