Some young people are free in the evenings or have days off at school, which way can bring them the most benefit?
1. To accumulate work experience by a part-time job or volunteering in a community
2. Learning to play a sport
3. Learning to play a musical instrument
Because young people like students have vast free times and holidays, their parents and school authorities have significant concern about these times. There are different ways for them to spend their free times like doing part-time job, cooperate in volunteering works, learning to play a sport, and learning to play a musical instrument. Some people if asked would mention all of these activities and another similar activity are proper and it is related to a great deal of factors while others would agree with one of them. As far as I am concerned, I adopt a firm position that even though different programs like part- time carrier or playing a musical instrument are very interesting and beneficial for juveniles but learning to play a sport is a better choice for all young people. In what follows I will cogently pinpoint my most conspicuous reasons to justify my point of view.
First of all, it is important to consider health of juveniles. As a matter of fact, when young people play sports and active games, respiration that is result of this activity help them to excrete their harmful and toxic materials from their body and they certainly are healthier and energetic physically and spiritually. By way of example, I can recall my school period that I selected playing soccer to spend my free times. By the beginning of university that I abandoned soccer I have constant weight while nowadays I am over-weighting.
Another equally significant point to be mentioned is that it option give a big chance young people to keep going on a specific sport professionally and gain much more income rather than other job that they would select through different choices. As all of us know, athletes and people who play sports professionally are as wealthiest people around the world. Clearly learning play a specific sport is the best option for children because in addition to their health, it constructs their future financially. To illustrate that idea let’s consider the following example. I remember my friends that continue playing soccer instead of going to university like me. Now, he is very well-known and rich guy while I have usual life.
In addition to what was mentioned above, it is so obvious that most young people are inclined to learning sports rather than other things. Therefore, it is fair to respect their choices because behind of these selections is interest and enterprising. The results of a study conducted in my university indicate that eighty percent of students would like to learn to play a sport rather than other various options. Another study also shows that interest play most pivotal role in success of doing every work.
By way of conclusion, based on the arguments explored above, I am of the opinion that in most cases sport and education of particular sport is far better stance for juveniles. Not only will take them health and energetic life but also help them to give more money in future and do something, which is their interest and concern. All aforementioned reasons point to my idea. However, an important issue that must be mentioned is that this cannot be used as a prescription for everybody and some counterexamples might exist.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, therefore, well, while, in addition, as a matter of fact, first of all, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2666.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 536.0 407.700716846 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97388059701 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81161862636 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7359958539 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492537313433 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 827.1 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.9397302842 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.913043478 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3043478261 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21739130435 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283312599295 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.076216679474 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0800811037707 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159536911167 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0890838029698 0.0645574589148 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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