successful development of a country, a government should spend more
money on young children’s education rather than on universities.
In today’s convoluted and competitive world, it becomes a highly charged and widespread hot topic whether government invests more money in young children's education or universities in order to the thriving of a country. Some people are the leading of the claim that universities are more important students are supposed to attend the society in the near future. However, others may take an opposite point of view and believe that spending more money on children's education would be more beneficial. If I have to face these to choices, I tend to choose the latter idea. There are some significant reasons, the most outstanding of which will be discussed in the ensuing paragraphs.
To begin with, nowadays, we are living in a sophisticated era in which young children are bombarded with a wide variety application of technology. Hence, if the government does not care about them, the future of a country will be damaged by this children. For this reason, the government should try to provide an opportunity for them to absorb the study and prevent them from the internet, video games, and other things. Let me give an example to illustrate this view much better. My little brother was easily influenced by X-box, his time was being wasted by this games until their school became electronic, an electronic book, board, and it was really interesting for him. He told me, Mehrdad studying is really interesting and he forgot X-box. For this reason had their school not invested money in updating their equipment, he would have continued playing vide-games more and more.
Apart from making school more interesting, the second debatable point is that some people believe that should not bring them devastated stress and tension by forcing them to study more and more and telling them about the future, inasmuch they have a vulnerable personality, yet on the other hand some others believe that nowadays, children are mature enough and they always think about their future, job opportunity, education, all of which engaged they mined negatively, therefore if they have a better opportunity, they are able to study without any kinds of destruction taught. I take the former viewpoint with a pinch of salt and claim that the latter viewpoint is much closer to the reality, for I do believe that the more have better facilities to education better, the more they can chase their dreams and fulfill their ambitions resulting in thriving of their country. For this reasons, spending money on children's education release their stress, which they are allowed to prepare for a promising future.
To wrap it up, considering all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that nowadays, spending more money on children's education bring several lucrative consequences for the governments compared to the universities, inasmuch as in the first place, they are kept away from some disturbing things such as video-games, and in the second place, they can study without any kinds of destruction taught stemming from thinking about their future
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, may, really, second, so, therefore, apart from, to begin with, in the first place, in the second place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2549.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 495.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14949494949 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71684168287 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74697410768 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50101010101 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 793.8 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 137.507258331 48.9658058833 281% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 159.3125 100.406767564 159% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.9375 20.6045352989 150% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.25 5.45110844103 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134408343004 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0487917563018 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0564534898555 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0936918315565 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0344222211938 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 11.7677419355 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 58.1214874552 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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