TPO-05 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.Use specific reasons and examples to suppo

Today so many things specially social networks attract people to spend too much time for enjoying. Different groups of people with similar interest are membering in these nets and chat with each other. On the other hand when people spend their time to do enjoyable things and have fun time time passes quickly and a person may spend several hours to chat with someone.
First, students are the most vulnerable of prefer to enjoy instead of doing things which have the most effect on their future life. Study is the most important priority for students that because they have good career, economy and life condition but most of students prefer to spend their time having fun in line or with their college. One reason of this behavior is that they haven't enough experience and knowledge to manage their time. Additionally some adult also involve in attractive enjoying activities almost always this have truble results for them such as loss of opportunities for build better future, entry dangerous people in their lives that cause complex problems for them, loose their physical and mental health and Having a false sense of happiness. Some employees also try to be in a social network instead of doing their duties. For an example, i read an article about comparison of employees efficiency in organs which monitoring their employees and avoid them of being in nets with others who their workers are free to engaged in each networking or spending their time with coworkers speaking and laughing, statics shows efficiency in second is fifty percent less than what was earn of datas for first grope.
Enjoy and have leisure time is a necessary for people but after a hard working during a long period of time instead of everywhere and everytime. Today's life and hard competition in organs, universities, among schools students don't allow people to devote their time to enjoy, they should work hard to attain their dreams and satisfy their life needs.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 286, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: time
...ime to do enjoyable things and have fun time time passes quickly and a person may spend s...
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Line 2, column 249, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the students') or simply say ''most students''.
Suggestion: most of the students; most students
... career, economy and life condition but most of students prefer to spend their time having fun i...
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Line 2, column 376, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: haven't
...ne reason of this behavior is that they havent enough experience and knowledge to mana...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 437, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Additionally,
...nce and knowledge to manage their time. Additionally some adult also involve in attractive e...
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Line 2, column 563, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...his have truble results for them such as loss of opportunities for build better f...
^^
Line 2, column 688, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
...s that cause complex problems for them, loose their physical and mental health and Ha...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 863, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... of doing their duties. For an example, i read an article about comparison of emp...
^
Line 2, column 1198, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'earned'.
Suggestion: earned
...ond is fifty percent less than what was earn of datas for first grope. Enjoy and ha...
^^^^
Line 3, column 94, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... but after a hard working during a long period of time instead of everywhere and everytime. To...
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Line 3, column 226, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...s, universities, among schools students dont allow people to devote their time to en...
^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'as for', 'such as', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.281609195402 0.229887763892 122% => OK
Verbs: 0.14367816092 0.158761421928 90% => OK
Adjectives: 0.10632183908 0.0866891130778 123% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0545977011494 0.046263068375 118% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0574712643678 0.0685040099705 84% => OK
Prepositions: 0.137931034483 0.118717715034 116% => OK
Participles: 0.0344827586207 0.0351676179071 98% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.34758275251 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0316091954023 0.0309702414327 102% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0545977011494 0.0887237588012 62% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00574712643678 0.0209618222197 27% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.0172413793103 0.0139019557991 124% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1955.0 2387.08602151 82% => OK
No of words: 328.0 408.028673835 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.96036585366 5.86048508987 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.48200974243 95% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.359756097561 0.338922669872 106% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.22256097561 0.251872472559 88% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.143292682927 0.174417080927 82% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.094512195122 0.112833075102 84% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34758275251 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.573170731707 0.524397521467 109% => OK
Word variations: 63.148159974 59.2087087015 107% => OK
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6684587814 53% => OK
Sentence length: 29.8181818182 20.5533526081 145% => OK
Sentence length SD: 93.6660147228 48.84282405 192% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 177.727272727 120.699889404 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.8181818182 20.5533526081 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.909090909091 0.644075263715 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.5376344086 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 5.54480286738 180% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 52.0742793792 45.7405998639 114% => OK
Elegance: 1.77528089888 1.45489161554 122% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224585082972 0.300154397459 75% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.16839292904 0.103427244359 163% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0857399235339 0.0752933317313 114% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.580818199839 0.497263757937 117% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.126849200416 0.151897553556 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117036874877 0.114077575197 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0695292352441 0.0781384742642 89% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.367356063069 0.336927656856 109% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0457286047712 0.067059652881 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190663565477 0.210909579961 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0766721843849 0.0618886996521 124% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8870967742 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.86379928315 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 8.42114695341 107% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 2.4623655914 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 13.6433691756 81% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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