TPO-08 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Perhaps, few subject in human society is as controversial as the impacts of the advertisement upon its audiences. It has been argued that since most advertisements have a negative influence on the different walk of life's attitude especially on young-age children, advertising should be restricted to them. While I believe it can not be generalized to all cases, I tend to agree with such a view based on the following concerns.

The first point to mention is that advertisements ' producers have always provided an exaggerated account for their products. In fact, for touting passive consumers, they have focused on those attributes which are appealing for most children while playing down others. Although in some snacks commercial, for example, alluring environment accompanied with flamboyant and colorful appearance has made kids to purchase this snacks regardless how its malfunction nutrition pose a threaten their health. In this sense, even if the advertisers have announced the possible consequence of using this product, these early aged kids may not comprehend the negative points due to lack of their literacy skills.

Another main strategy adopted by advertisers is to change children concepts about their basic appetite and preference. Due to this fact that they are not able to distinguish by which means they can meet their needs, advertising products are regarded as a reliable commodity. In addition, when children have seen that other peers' pursue advertisements for obtaining their necessities, they unconsciously tend to possess these products. However, it should be noted that not all the parents can afford these expensive products. Hence, these little kids who are less concern with price follow and admire some, if not all, fashionable commodities.

On the other side, it is clearly perceived that children become more knowledgeable when the time flies. In this regard, advertising can be known as a source of information for them. As a matter of fact, some non-profit campaign such as Anti-smoking or having healthy diet has played significant role in boosting children; knowledge about their environments. Nonetheless, most kids may not clearly understand the essence of these measures.

To recapitulate, different aspects of advertisements impacts on little kids have been considered. As it was stated, not only do they mislead by concepts of products but also they get used to being extravagant by following luxury and unnecessary commodities. Conversely, some beneficial advertisements can boost their environmental knowledge.

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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'conversely', 'first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'nonetheless', 'so', 'while', 'for example', 'in addition', 'in fact', 'such as', 'as a matter of fact']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.221967963387 0.229887763892 97% => OK
Verbs: 0.180778032037 0.158761421928 114% => OK
Adjectives: 0.100686498856 0.0866891130778 116% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0480549199085 0.046263068375 104% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0572082379863 0.0685040099705 84% => OK
Prepositions: 0.128146453089 0.118717715034 108% => OK
Participles: 0.070938215103 0.0351676179071 202% => Less participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 3.12361489827 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0274599542334 0.0309702414327 89% => OK
Particles: 0.00228832951945 0.00188951952338 121% => OK
Determiners: 0.0846681922197 0.0887237588012 95% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0205949656751 0.0209618222197 98% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0137299771167 0.0139019557991 99% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2568.0 2387.08602151 108% => OK
No of words: 394.0 408.028673835 97% => OK
Chars per words: 6.51776649746 5.86048508987 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48200974243 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.393401015228 0.338922669872 116% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.329949238579 0.251872472559 131% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.261421319797 0.174417080927 150% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.187817258883 0.112833075102 166% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12361489827 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57614213198 0.524397521467 110% => OK
Word variations: 67.7188252118 59.2087087015 114% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6684587814 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.7368421053 20.5533526081 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.5667473251 48.84282405 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.157894737 120.699889404 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7368421053 20.5533526081 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.842105263158 0.644075263715 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 53.7317659631 45.7405998639 117% => OK
Elegance: 1.472 1.45489161554 101% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194213018412 0.300154397459 65% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0716563310117 0.103427244359 69% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0465347862744 0.0752933317313 62% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.473123142651 0.497263757937 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.0945151922074 0.151897553556 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0697687525026 0.114077575197 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0441576732875 0.0781384742642 57% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.222684905786 0.336927656856 66% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0669455771348 0.067059652881 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12510717937 0.210909579961 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0423678275178 0.0618886996521 68% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8870967742 59% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.91756272401 142% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 8.42114695341 59% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 7.0 2.75985663082 254% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.6433691756 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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