TPO-11 - Independent Writing Task Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?Use specific reasons and examples to support you

Everyone has their own view point about the latest technology that has changed the entire way working of people all over the world. But is it justified to have such a technology that gives unrestricted liberty to people to access anything or is it incorrect to provide such an intricate tool in the hand of public including children? Well, some people think that it is a great thing for everyone as helps in doing work. However, I do not concur with this notion because of the following reasons and justifications.

First, it is not at all healthy for the young generation of today’s modern world. Now, to elaborate this I would like to draw your attention towards the drawbacks of this technology. As we all know that life of a student is very tough nowadays as there is cut throat competition everywhere. If a student wants to get success then she/he has to work hard and prove himself/herself. In order to do so, there is no time to waste but due to the internet there are various things that are capable of distracting one’s focus from studies to chatting on social networking site or to play games and watch movies online and many more. The list is endless; I can give an example of my own fifteen year old son who was highly addicted to chatting on social networking sites. As a result of which he failed in his tenth standard. This made me realized that how lethal the side effects of internet could be.

Second, not to mention that the interaction among people have reduced because of internet. In olden times, people used to meet their friends and family in free time. This was very helpful as it used to relieve stress and made people happy. This also allowed people to develop strong bonding not only with their relatives and friends but also with their neighbors and so they never felt lonely and always used to get help in emergency. On the other hand, people now prefer to spend their free time by chatting with a online friend who they don’t even know properly and who is probably miles away from them and cannot help them if they need but do not like to mingle with their neighbor who can always help them, if they have good relationship with them. I can recall, one’s I was out of town and my son met with an accident. MY wife was alone at home and did not have anyone , so she asked help from our neighbors and because we never interacted with them, they were reluctant initially to help but after requesting they helped my wife a lot. This taught me a lesson that how important it is have good relationship with one’s neighbors than to have hundreds of friends online.

To recapitulate, I would like to say that I am not denying the benefits of internet, of course, it is great thing to learn especially for children as they can learn new skills through it but it is extremely important to see that it is not being misused by them. Also, it not good to completely depend on it for everything as we all are social animals

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 707, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'son' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'sons'.
Suggestion: sons
...e an example of my own fifteen year old son who was highly addicted to chatting on ...
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Line 3, column 775, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...to chatting on social networking sites. As a result of which he failed in his tent...
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Line 5, column 515, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... spend their free time by chatting with a online friend who they don't even ...
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Line 5, column 644, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...m them and cannot help them if they need but do not like to mingle with their nei...
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Line 5, column 885, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...as alone at home and did not have anyone , so she asked help from our neighbors an...
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Line 5, column 1103, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
...ht me a lesson that how important it is have good relationship with one's neigh...
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Line 7, column 45, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...ecapitulate, I would like to say that I am not denying the benefits of internet, of course, it...
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Line 7, column 351, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... everything as we all are social animals
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'well', 'as to', 'of course', 'as a result', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.189597315436 0.229887763892 82% => OK
Verbs: 0.177852348993 0.158761421928 112% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0822147651007 0.0866891130778 95% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0654362416107 0.046263068375 141% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0855704697987 0.0685040099705 125% => OK
Prepositions: 0.125838926174 0.118717715034 106% => OK
Participles: 0.0268456375839 0.0351676179071 76% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.50964062038 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0469798657718 0.0309702414327 152% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0620805369128 0.0887237588012 70% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0134228187919 0.0209618222197 64% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0184563758389 0.0139019557991 133% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2977.0 2387.08602151 125% => OK
No of words: 538.0 408.028673835 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.53345724907 5.86048508987 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81610080973 4.48200974243 107% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.288104089219 0.338922669872 85% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.195167286245 0.251872472559 77% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.126394052045 0.174417080927 72% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0910780669145 0.112833075102 81% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50964062038 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503717472119 0.524397521467 96% => OK
Word variations: 60.7459263674 59.2087087015 103% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6684587814 106% => OK
Sentence length: 24.4545454545 20.5533526081 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.1629955994 48.84282405 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.318181818 120.699889404 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4545454545 20.5533526081 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.590909090909 0.644075263715 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.54480286738 144% => OK
Readability: 43.9712740791 45.7405998639 96% => OK
Elegance: 1.04081632653 1.45489161554 72% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27700666768 0.300154397459 92% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.108152060728 0.103427244359 105% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0737552942519 0.0752933317313 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.45907754929 0.497263757937 92% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.16573427469 0.151897553556 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103178898444 0.114077575197 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0447178132349 0.0781384742642 57% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.343344276358 0.336927656856 102% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0653977595714 0.067059652881 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193346332662 0.210909579961 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0494575220693 0.0618886996521 80% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.91756272401 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 8.42114695341 142% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.75985663082 145% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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