It is thought that it is advisible for a person to work in a similar field as his parents. However, I oppose this idea that it is better for a person to choose a job similar to parents' jobs than to work in an occupation different from parents' job. In my opinion, I think a person's choice of job has little relevence with parents' job.
To begin with, individuals decide their working fields based on various factors, such as education, salary and location. Some people prefer to work in the field that they studied in university because professional work earns more payment. However, others, for example, just find an unskilled work near home simply for the reason that he loves hometome. Therefore, people's decision on jobs have little relation with their parents' job. If there is any chance that an adult works in the same field as his father does, he certainly benefits form experience of his father. However, I do not indicate that it is better for a worker to choose to work in the identical field as parents' job.
Moreover, I believe it is everybody's nature to hate their job because everyone hates work. On the hypothesis that father and son work in the same kind of job, it is more likely for the two to complaint about their job, rather to explore each other's job.Besides, nobody would like to talk about their job in leisure time because people prefer to left work behind in their working environment. Consequently, both will avoid to talk about their jobs togehter and there will be less experience passed from father to son. Thus, little support will be forwarded by father to son.
In summary, I disagree with the view that choosing to work in a similar job as parents did will benefit individuals. One reason is that it is not common for a person to work in a field similar to parents, and another reason is that work in the same occupation as parents actually provide little help.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 254, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Besides
... job, rather to explore each others job.Besides, nobody would like to talk about their ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, consequently, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, for example, i think, in summary, kind of, such as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1567.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 337.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64985163205 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47830445536 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.483679525223 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 498.6 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.5492174162 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.466666667 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4666666667 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4666666667 5.45110844103 192% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.358453330282 0.236089414692 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154680185827 0.076458572812 202% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.139273631455 0.0737576698707 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.25973137454 0.150856017488 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0872908515869 0.0645574589148 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.99 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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