TPO-27 - Independent Writing TaskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would bemore satisfying.Use specific reasons and exam

In this complex and modern world obtain a job is very difficult because of competition for limited jobs availability. Some people believes that people should grab the secure jobs right away. While, others says that should wait for job that's more satisfying. In my opinion people should get secure job right away, the reasons are as follows.

To begin with, secure jobs gives us piece of mind.although satisfying jobs offers more benefits than secure job, but the fear of loosing job is always stay in people mind. When people are not comfortable with the job they cant't enjoy the time at work and not able to perform their duty in well manners. On the other hands, secure job people knows that if they made any mistake or take off from the work there is no harm with the job.So secure jobs offers more satisfaction for people and piece of mind.

Moreover, secure job have freedom for worker, secure jobs usually permanent and mostly government jobs. Workers have more options if they don't want to works or wants leaves nobody force them because of less pressure on management which allows them to do so. satisfying jobs are manage by owners or managing by directors which force the workers to do work according to company rules. Secure jobs have more options and more freedom in work hours.

In conclusions, people should choose the secure job because it's offers piece of mind as well as more freedom at job.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, so, well, while, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 43.0788530466 30% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1172.0 1977.66487455 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 246.0 407.700716846 60% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76422764228 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96035189615 4.48103885553 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.25785107275 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 212.727598566 63% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548780487805 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 362.7 618.680645161 59% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.6493297265 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.6666666667 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.16666666667 5.45110844103 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.5376344086 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351813771086 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.169413678916 0.076458572812 222% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0829113137359 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.236384254607 0.150856017488 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0888491776783 0.0645574589148 138% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 86.8835125448 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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