TPO-31- Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the pastUse specific reasons and examples to

Human beings always put all their efforts to have a happy life. Many philosophers have agreed upon this fact that happiness is the most conspicuous reason for creation of human beings. However, true happiness is an internal issue, there are lots of factors involved with becoming happy. In this regard, a question arises and that is have the ways of being happiness changed? In other words, are people in these days are happier than people in past era? If so, is it due to the quick changes in modern life or not? As a matter of fact, I believe that this issue depends on various factors. In what follows, I will delve into my double-side point of view.

First off, considering this fact that living in a modern era and accessing to wide variety of facilitate has motivated people to spend most of their time on doing entertainments related to new technology. They are surprised by abundant of amazing things that evoke their excitement. Not only will they enjoy more time, but also they will taste new tools that have not been before. For instance, my grandmother recently has purchased an intelligent cellphone. She thinks that it is a wonderful thing to use and it has amazing applications that make her exhilarated. Once she told me about her young ages. Her family got stock in doing hard works and there was no sign of happiness in her family. But now, she wishes that she live in this period of time, only just because there are more opportunities to be happy.

On the other hand, some people might think of the difficulties that people nowadays are facing. I think in some cases, they are right. Difficulties such as finding a decent job or easy marriage which used to be so common and typical in the past era, have declined the people’s impetus to be happy. For instance, my brother studied in the prestigious university and graduated with high grades. But unfortunately, he has got stock in the hectic lifestyle that people hardly can find a decent job due to the fact that there are numerous amount of economic problems and there are lots of competition for job position. Thus, all in all, the level of happiness is depended on social circumstances. If people be in easy reachable society, they are more likely to be happy.

To put it briefly, contemplating both sides, one soon realizes that lots of factors are involved in evaluating how much people are happy. Either social condition or technological advances can be determining for this issue. But everyone should bear in mind this fact that they do not have rely on other external agents to be happy. As I mentioned before, the origin of happiness is inside of people’s minds and hearts.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 334, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
...s regard, a question arises and that is have the ways of being happiness changed? In...
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Line 3, column 566, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Once” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...applications that make her exhilarated. Once she told me about her young ages. Her f...
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Line 3, column 738, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...t now, she wishes that she live in this period of time, only just because there are more oppor...
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Line 5, column 540, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'amounts'?
Suggestion: amounts
...due to the fact that there are numerous amount of economic problems and there are lots...
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Line 7, column 116, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
... factors are involved in evaluating how much people are happy. Either social conditi...
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Line 7, column 289, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'relied'.
Suggestion: relied
...in mind this fact that they do not have rely on other external agents to be happy. A...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, first, however, if, so, thus, for instance, i think, such as, as a matter of fact, in other words, in some cases, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2210.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 465.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75268817204 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.664466661 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529032258065 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 703.8 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.0875043771 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.8518518519 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2222222222 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.59259259259 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160888198427 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0431277746714 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0366837875043 0.0737576698707 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100499575622 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0330075121674 0.0645574589148 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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