When it comes to the ability to determine decisions which impacts our society, many people believe that young people are not mature enough to make critical decisions. However, people are born with basic rights to express their ideas and to vote.
Young people do have the right to vote for national and local leaders. In my country, it is true that this right is only for people who are legally 20 years old rather than literally for every young people. Therefore, people over 20 are supposed to have the ability to think what is beneficial to their country, or our legislative yuan will limit this right to people who are older than 20, such as 25 or so. Hence, our country believes, or expects, the young, who are over 20, in their decision making ability. In my country, citizens over 20 are eligible for voting for presidents and for city mayors. In addition, the voting rates of young people is up to 90%. In contrast, the voting rate of people over 40 is not even 50%. As a result, the young are actually decide the vital decisions that determine our country's future.
Moreover, young people also have the right to express their ideas. In fact, it is the elemental rights to every human being, regardless of age, gender, intelligence or social statues. In my country, sometimes the young oppose for biased legislation, unhealthy products, or for materials that cause serious harm to our environments through campaigns or boycotts. Earlier this year, almost every student went to streets since they have been eating food products of a huge but immoral company. They claimed that their products are all made from "natural" ingredients; however, it found out to be a huge lie. Those foods are made up of artificial ingredients, which not only pose threats to human health but also harm the environment. Some people even stop buying their products. Thus, the young can express their thoughts.
Consequently, young people nowadays do have influence on decisions that determine the future of our society through the fundamental rights to vote and to boycott through actions.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 664, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ing rates of young people is up to 90%. In contrast, the voting rate of people ove...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'decided'.
Suggestion: decided
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'consequently', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'in addition', 'in contrast', 'in fact', 'such as', 'as a result', 'it is true']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.218137254902 0.229887763892 95% => OK
Verbs: 0.147058823529 0.158761421928 93% => OK
Adjectives: 0.093137254902 0.0866891130778 107% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0612745098039 0.046263068375 132% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0539215686275 0.0685040099705 79% => OK
Prepositions: 0.102941176471 0.118717715034 87% => OK
Participles: 0.0245098039216 0.0351676179071 70% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.59995803169 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.046568627451 0.0309702414327 150% => OK
Particles: 0.00245098039216 0.00188951952338 130% => OK
Determiners: 0.0661764705882 0.0887237588012 75% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00490196078431 0.0209618222197 23% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.0245098039216 0.0139019557991 176% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2084.0 2387.08602151 87% => OK
No of words: 352.0 408.028673835 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.92045454545 5.86048508987 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.48200974243 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.346590909091 0.338922669872 102% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.247159090909 0.251872472559 98% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.173295454545 0.174417080927 99% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.105113636364 0.112833075102 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59995803169 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522727272727 0.524397521467 100% => OK
Word variations: 55.8825782368 59.2087087015 94% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6684587814 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.5263157895 20.5533526081 90% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.2570800151 48.84282405 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.684210526 120.699889404 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5263157895 20.5533526081 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.947368421053 0.644075263715 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 43.2422248804 45.7405998639 95% => OK
Elegance: 1.31775700935 1.45489161554 91% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314735231966 0.300154397459 105% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.136485985808 0.103427244359 132% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0955733190553 0.0752933317313 127% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.489092975418 0.497263757937 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.178568740794 0.151897553556 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130395495212 0.114077575197 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0555556573142 0.0781384742642 71% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.346496589298 0.336927656856 103% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.056719140854 0.067059652881 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216199860027 0.210909579961 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0437121745751 0.0618886996521 71% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8870967742 50% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.86379928315 155% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.91756272401 142% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 8.42114695341 59% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.4623655914 203% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.75985663082 181% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.6433691756 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.