A glance at today's parents way of rewarding their children on studying brings to light a question that has several times provoked debate, namely, whether it is advisable for parents to offer school-age children money for high grades. Some might contend that by doing so the students can be motivated to study harder and make progress continually. However, I would like to assert that parents are not supposed to provide financial awards for children's study.
First and foremost, getting money from good grades distorts the real goal of study. Needless to say, children go to school to satisfy the instinctive curiosity of understanding the world, and to be equipped with essential knowledge for getting a job when they grow up. But if parents use money to reward children for their success in study, it is likely to leave the impression on children that they study hard so that they can use the money to buy things they want. Were they had formed this thought, it would be difficult for them to figure out the aim of learning and easily lose the enthusiasm for pursuing knowledge as soon as the financial reward stops.
Secondly, the method of financially rewarding children for good results in exams can backfire. It is undeniable that students need to learn every subject as equally hard as possible, regardless of how they had performed in the previous tests, for they are faced with new knowledge from time to time. As one can imagine, if the students study only to get money from their parents, they will naturally spend more time and energy on those subjects that they can make progress relatively easily, and ignore those that they already done well or do not seem to have the ability to do better. This can eventually lead to unbalanced development of the student.
Admittedly, there are some justifications by those who argue that offering school-age children money for high marks is reasonable. For example, children can learn that it is only their own diligent work that brings about fortune to them, which can be a valuable notion when they commence their careers. Nonetheless, I still affirm that students can also pick up this idea through a part-time job. By doing so, not only can they have a meaningful experience in their student days, but they can also get paid and harvest a sense of achievement and satisfactory. Hence, it is definitely unnecessary for parents to offer money for their children as an award for their hard work in study.
Due to the aforementioned ground, parents should always bear in mind that it is unwise to offer their children money for high grades they receive at school, and the real purpose of getting knowledge and balanced development of the student are two prime and conspicuous reasons.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, still, thus, well, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2283.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 466.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8991416309 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60425651604 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502145922747 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 696.6 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.3314298922 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.294117647 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4117647059 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05882352941 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.32946097169 0.236089414692 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122850824265 0.076458572812 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0746807408801 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215722108256 0.150856017488 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477052227577 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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