When it comes to allowance, people in general believe that parents should give their children sufficient allowance so that their children will concentrate on studying rather than being distracted by taking parttime jobs. On the other hand, quite a few people think that working parttime jobs teach their children the value of money. However, parents award their children for each high grade by offering them money is a feasible way for children to earn more allowance.
Allowance can be served as a motivation of studying. Children spend money on commute, eating, fashion clothes or new technology in order to fit in with their friends or to make new friends. It is possible that allowance will be used up soon, yet their parents disagree with children working parttime. Therefore, if they want their children to focus on their schoolwork without being occupied by parttime jobs, they could give their children more money for awarding their excellent performance. As a child, my parents use this method as incentive to motivate my desire for learning. Whenever I get an A, my mom gives me a hundred dollar for extra allowance. In order to earn more money, I made great efforts every day throughout my entire high school years. In the end, offering extra money for every excellence helped me enter to my dream university.
On the other hand, parents should also give extra money for making huge progress. With sibling pressures, it is possible for one of the siblings to quit attempting to be diligent at studying. My sister always lives under my pressure since she did not have excellent performance in her grades. Thus, she had never been given extra money for awarding great performance in school even though how industrious she was. I tried to persuade my parents to offer her more allowance for making huge progress even if she did not have high grades in her tests, but they insisted. Nevertheless, she is adept at all kinds of sports activities. I tried to convince my parents for awarding her outstanding sports performance because studying is not the only way for success, and they should support my sister. They finally became enlighten and agreed that everyone has strengths and drawbacks; as a result, they gave her extra allowance for making progress on learning or winning sports competition.
Consequently, parents should offer their school-age children money for each great grade they get in school for awarding. It is also beneficial to their children since it serves as a motivation for learning.
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'consequently', 'finally', 'however', 'if', 'nevertheless', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'in general', 'as a result', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.234273318872 0.229887763892 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.186550976139 0.158761421928 118% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0824295010846 0.0866891130778 95% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0368763557484 0.046263068375 80% => OK
Pronouns: 0.110629067245 0.0685040099705 161% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.138828633406 0.118717715034 117% => OK
Participles: 0.0672451193059 0.0351676179071 191% => Less participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.63398865408 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0303687635575 0.0309702414327 98% => OK
Particles: 0.00216919739696 0.00188951952338 115% => OK
Determiners: 0.0433839479393 0.0887237588012 49% => Some determiners wanted.
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0173535791757 0.0209618222197 83% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00650759219089 0.0139019557991 47% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2513.0 2387.08602151 105% => OK
No of words: 419.0 408.028673835 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.99761336516 5.86048508987 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.35799522673 0.338922669872 106% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.27446300716 0.251872472559 109% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.210023866348 0.174417080927 120% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.112171837709 0.112833075102 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63398865408 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498806682578 0.524397521467 95% => OK
Word variations: 55.3781251497 59.2087087015 94% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6684587814 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.9523809524 20.5533526081 97% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2320113194 48.84282405 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.666666667 120.699889404 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9523809524 20.5533526081 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.619047619048 0.644075263715 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.54480286738 0% => OK
Readability: 47.3986816684 45.7405998639 104% => OK
Elegance: 1.31818181818 1.45489161554 91% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279528822337 0.300154397459 93% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.096006733637 0.103427244359 93% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0658153980925 0.0752933317313 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.450087034174 0.497263757937 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.149397149576 0.151897553556 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100367776563 0.114077575197 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0781085862148 0.0781384742642 100% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.351524985874 0.336927656856 104% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0686477155347 0.067059652881 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219965869111 0.210909579961 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.07046559556 0.0618886996521 114% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8870967742 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 13.0 8.42114695341 154% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.