TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th

Due to the fast pace of this modern society, how to accompany with kids becomes a heated topic among busy parents. They may have just several hours to spend with their children per week. Some of them decide to have fun with their kids by playing games or sports together, while others may be more willing to use that time to do schoolwork with their children. From my standpoint, I prefer the latter one that busy parents should spend their time to do schoolwork with their kids.

To begin with, schoolwork plays a pivotal role in the development of children and parents are supposed to assist their kids to accomplish it. Undoubtedly, during the education period of one's life, it is crucial for him or her to finish the tasks related to schoolwork, which is beneficial to his or her grades and future career. When dealing with schoolwork, most kids will not fully concentrate on it if their parents are absent, according to my personal experience. Take myself for example, I would play video games and watch TV if my parents were not at home when I was a kid. This is a really common circumstance especially for young kids. In this way, it is better for children to manage their homework under the accompany and guidance of their parents. Therefore, busy parents are supposed to spend their precious time to do schoolwork with their children together.

In addition, it is more likely for busy parents to have a rest after an exhausted working day and prepare for the next annoying day. They may not have sufficient energy and willingness to play games or sports with their children, because these events are extremely energy-costly. As a result, doing schoolwork with their children is the middle point between having a rest themselves and spending time with their children.

Admittedly, having fun playing games and sports is also a significant component of one's childhood. However, under the circumstance that parents are busy working, kids could play games and sports with their friends, which is a reasonable method for both parts. Also, kids could take part in some sports clubs to reinforce their team spirits.

Judging from the situations and examples mentioned above, we could easily find that it is better for busy parents to spend their precious time doing schoolwork with their children.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, really, so, therefore, while, for example, in addition, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1921.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91304347826 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57054241995 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496163682864 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 565.2 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.5321464117 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.722222222 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7222222222 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88888888889 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.346682935189 0.236089414692 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131628278376 0.076458572812 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101295254518 0.0737576698707 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229741123316 0.150856017488 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0721201753717 0.0645574589148 112% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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