TPO-44: Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The high demands of the modern times require long, tedious work hours for parents, leaving them with inadequate time to tend to all their children’s need. In this situation, many argue that the best use of the time designated to children is to be spent on school related work, such as helping them with their homework or school projects. Others suggest it is most effective to spend this time for leisure activities. Although there are many pros and cons for both points of view, I believe it would be most beneficial if the few free hours parents have left after long work days be spent on fun activities. The reasons for my opinion are as follows.
Between the parent at work and children at school, there is already very little time for the family to connect. This insufficient time for bonding could lead to a growing tension in children, causing them to be hostile towards their parents and in demand of more of their time. If the few hours parent have for their children are dedicated to tedious schoolwork, I think this tension and hostile environment in the family could rise. This could push the children further away from their parents and into isolation. Whereas, thoughtful hours of fun, leisure activities, such as playing sports, going to the zoo or the park and playing games, could lead to an effective bonding and a growing affection and understanding between the children and their parents.
Another reason for my viewpoint is that if the children’s need for entertaining activities are not met within the family, they might turn to friends or other less trusted companions. With their parent not around to watch over them all the time, they could befriend the wrong people and put themselves in harm’s way. But, if their demand for excitement are met within the family or with their parents’ surveillance, troubling activities or behavior could be prevented.
Also, I believe by spending time with their children for activities that interest them, parent can develop a healthy relationship with their kids. Thus, the kids can turn to their parents for guidance whenever they require assistance and the parents can protect and guide their loved in difficult conditions. This relationship could also be effective for their schoolwork, because if ever it is required for parents to spend time with their children tending to problems in school, the kids will be more willing to listen and cooperate as they are more affectionate and trustworthy toward their parents.
Overall, I believe parents should balance their time with their children in order to tend to all their needs, including school related problems and demands for leisure activities. But when there is little time to be spent with the kids, parent should make entertainment and fun activities their priority in order to build a strong and healthy relationship with their loved ones.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, thus, whereas, i think, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2409.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 479.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02922755741 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66108058681 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.446764091858 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 702.9 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.0047647998 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.833333333 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6111111111 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.77777777778 5.45110844103 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287965360089 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115537760374 0.076458572812 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0579445364797 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187457927899 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0419375347691 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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