Undoubtedly, celebrities are an integral part of modern life who feature largely in changing the picture of societies by contribution to many charities and by spreading their ideas and concepts through communities. This brings up a controversial question: do celebrities influence the younger adults more than they do effect older people. Personally speaking, I strongly believe that younger individuals are more inspired from celebrities than older people do. There are three points in support of my viewpoint that are discussed in the following passage.
Firstly, younger individuals are often look forward to high social status. They firmly believe that famous athletes and actors possess higher social prestige because earn higher salaries than ordinary people. They are always major subject of breaking issues in magazines and newspaper and this is only because they more important than others. The significant role of celebrities in society gives the youth enough reasons to try to follow their lifestyle. Conversely, older people know that high social class is not that important so it is less likely to see an old person to follow a popular actress or sportsperson.
Furthermore, young people want to be modern. Unfortunately, teenagers always think that their parents are old-fashioned and their school of thought is rather old, so they prefer to obey models who are likely to be more modern. Modern people have special diets not traditional ones. They do not live in old-fashioned houses. They wear fashionable clothes that all fit better to modern and developed lives. Therefore, the young tend to imitate modernized role models that are suitable for modern life. However, old people never care about modernization and they are less attracted by the appearance of celebrities.
Finally, younger adults are inclined to have more fun. Younger adults want to be happy, spending a lot of time with their friends and freely spend money on their interests. Interestingly, celebrities are likely to have the same life way. Their lives seem to be so interesting since they are always traveling around the world and they do whatever they want to without any constraint. This is the convenient life by which most teenagers and young individuals are affected. As a result, as they see the happiness and satisfaction of celebrities they want to live the same as they live. On the other hand, older people find joy in being with their families, so they do not need to be similar to anyone to enjoy their lives.
To summarize, taking into account all these factors, I conclude that having a modern life full of joy with a high social prestige is what young people rather look forward to than older people do. Consequently, the youth are more influenced by celebrities’ life style.
Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'consequently', 'conversely', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'so', 'therefore', 'as a result', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.210420841683 0.229887763892 92% => OK
Verbs: 0.176352705411 0.158761421928 111% => OK
Adjectives: 0.138276553106 0.0866891130778 160% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0681362725451 0.046263068375 147% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0561122244489 0.0685040099705 82% => OK
Prepositions: 0.10621242485 0.118717715034 89% => OK
Participles: 0.0240480961924 0.0351676179071 68% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.8272804188 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0440881763527 0.0309702414327 142% => OK
Particles: 0.00200400801603 0.00188951952338 106% => OK
Determiners: 0.060120240481 0.0887237588012 68% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0 0.0209618222197 0% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.0140280561122 0.0139019557991 101% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2793.0 2387.08602151 117% => OK
No of words: 452.0 408.028673835 111% => OK
Chars per words: 6.17920353982 5.86048508987 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.48200974243 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.387168141593 0.338922669872 114% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.265486725664 0.251872472559 105% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.179203539823 0.174417080927 103% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.132743362832 0.112833075102 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8272804188 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502212389381 0.524397521467 96% => OK
Word variations: 57.2719074571 59.2087087015 97% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6684587814 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.08 20.5533526081 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.0255749547 48.84282405 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.72 120.699889404 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.08 20.5533526081 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.56 0.644075263715 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.54480286738 0% => OK
Readability: 44.6286725664 45.7405998639 98% => OK
Elegance: 1.13333333333 1.45489161554 78% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.47179123546 0.300154397459 157% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0840400533516 0.103427244359 81% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0637325307279 0.0752933317313 85% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.460086126246 0.497263757937 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.126723339294 0.151897553556 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.162676539619 0.114077575197 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0534468337031 0.0781384742642 68% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.341389655796 0.336927656856 101% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0790987076523 0.067059652881 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.315338986012 0.210909579961 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0516087952976 0.0618886996521 83% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8870967742 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.91756272401 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 14.0 8.42114695341 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.75985663082 181% => OK
Total topic words: 22.0 13.6433691756 161% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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