TPO-48: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Even though technologies like cell phones, cars, and airplanes etc. that can speed up our lives are widely used, still people feel their every day lives are in mess now and then. It's fair to say that, planning and organizating abilities are needed more than ever in our lives these days.
In my childhood, I used to live in a small town where people pretty much knows each other from this town, and it will only take you half day to tour around the whole place. When you wake up in the morning, you have a whole day spreading in front of you, with no assignments, no agenda. At any time, visitors could pop in your house without any notices ahead.
As much as I enjoyed that kind of life, Beijing, an cosmopolitan city, is where I live and work and play now. Life becomes much more complicated. It takes one hour to commute from work to home everyday. The job assigned to me today requires new skills I haven't learned in college, I definitely need to take some after-school study in order to be adept in our work. Not to mention, I have to squeeze some gym time from my already tight schedule to prevent my body from distorting too much. And if you want to have gathering with your friends for fun at weekend, make appointments, otherwise no one can be available for your spontateous ideas.
This is the world most of us young people living in. This is the reality. In order to survive from this rapidly changing society, we sort out our schedule in advance, we make monthly schedule, yearly schedule. We even set up our goals for the next decade. So, yes, I agree that it's essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 50, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...s I enjoyed that kind of life, Beijing, an cosmopolitan city, is where I live and ...
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Line 5, column 194, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...s one hour to commute from work to home everyday. The job assigned to me today requires ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 255, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: haven't
...igned to me today requires new skills I havent learned in college, I definitely need t...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 139, Rule ID: CONFUSION_OF_OUR_OUT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'our'?
Suggestion: our
... this rapidly changing society, we sort out our schedule in advance, we make monthl...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, still, then, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1349.0 1977.66487455 68% => OK
No of words: 303.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.45214521452 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37383450175 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627062706271 0.524837075471 119% => OK
syllable_count: 429.3 618.680645161 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.19358171 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.3529411765 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8235294118 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.64705882353 5.45110844103 30% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176892290964 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0555021046965 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0803239280448 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0994422928464 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0401989942206 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.23 10.9000537634 76% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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