TPO 48- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.
Nowadays, life has become very complex, and this complication requires an appropriate approach to live. Without the shadow of a doubt, people are putting much more effort to have a better subsistence than they would do back in the day, and all this has led to the necessity of providing new approaches for life. Thus, a controversial question which arises is whether it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan or organize. In my opinion, the role of planning in life is indispensable, and in the ensuing line, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons to advocate my viewpoint.
The first reason coming to mind is concerned with this issue that organization and planning is the trend of successful people. Through life, humans are always looking for epitomes and patterns to imitate them and take them as the role model at a particular profession, and to be honest it is the most secure way. For instance, by reading the diary of steve jobs, who is a decent businessman and entrepreneur, we may find out that not only he was organized toward his job issues but also, he had a schedule for even his private works and chores. Definitely, steve jobs is not an exception and we can find other successful organized people in almost every other field. As a result, it seems a rational and logical fashion to keep track of these excellent role models.
Another equally important reason which is worth to be mentioned is the control that organized people in case of emergency and crisis. people with plans are more likely to pass the crucial times than ordinary people. they usually have a contingency plan and predict bad things that might happen. Then, when a bad thing happens, they are less vulnerable and susceptible to the detrimental effects than their competitors which have no plan. it is more important when it comes to the business. For example, my uncle owns a business and besides that, he had invested in some other businesses and as he told me, did not put all his money in a single pocket. Two years ago, a heavy stagnation hit his primary business and led to the bankruptcy of his rivals. but, he could survive. Hence, if he had not invested in other businesses, and had not predicted a hash situation for his main job, he would have been destroyed and fully bankrupted like his counterparts. To sum it up, it is important to have a plan in case of emergency.
Finally, from what has been discussed above, we may reach the conclusion that it is important for young people to have the ability to plan. it is hard to disguise that all prominent people have had a plan for their life and they are prepared for hard times.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, hence, if, look, may, so, then, thus, for example, for instance, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2198.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 470.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67659574468 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64376235741 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529787234043 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 698.4 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.3680782903 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.666666667 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.380952381 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04761904762 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239966662751 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.07243774495 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0726723165269 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169192114114 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0837588345369 0.0645574589148 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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