TPO-48 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.

Modern lifestyle causes anxiety in a lot of young people because there is a lot of work to do and less time. Therefore, many young people feel that their life is going to be very complex, so they need to be able to draw an ordered plan for each day of life. Many years ago that the lifestyle was very simple, the people did not need to a plan very discipline schedule for their life. I believe the modern life needs skills for organizing the works because there is a lot of work to do and without this ability, people will confront less time and their life will be very complex. Furthermore, everyone needs some time to be relaxed, hence organizing time is very important.

Today everyone, especially young people in their life need to be a lot of things. For instance, they should earn money, pay the bills, check their automobile or other devices, educate at school or university. Also, they should do some works at home such as cooking or cleaning and take care of their children or parents. Therefore, for doing all of these works they need to be able for planning a good schedule. For example, when I transferred to another city for my graduation, I should have done all of my work alone. At first, I feel confused by that amount of works, then I learned how to organize my work. Now I feel relaxed because I can do all of my duties in an ordered manner.

Furthermore, each company or each kind of services like universities has their ordered schedules that we need to be aware of them for working in that company or using those services. For instance, young people usually need to use some special services such as education, for this purpose they should know the schedules of universities and be able to organize for registration, fee tuition, deadlines, exam times and so on. Hence the ability to plan for doing everything is extremely important to be successful in life.

Finally, young people need to do hobbies and taking care of their health. Most of them prefer to spend some time with their friends therefore, they should be able to tune their time. For instance, I need some time for relaxation each week like spending time with my family and exercise twice a week for taking care of my health. For this purpose, I need to organize my other works to have some vacancy time every week. Hence the ability to plan in this complex world is very useful for their body and living healthy.

Conclusion, young people should have the ability for planning and organizing in their life. Because in this complex mechanic world, we need to do vast of works and still live healthily and feel relax.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 665, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an ordered manner" with adverb for "ordered"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...laxed because I can do all of my duties in an ordered manner. Furthermore, each company or each k...
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Line 5, column 424, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ition, deadlines, exam times and so on. Hence the ability to plan for doing everythin...
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Line 7, column 420, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...s to have some vacancy time every week. Hence the ability to plan in this complex wor...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, furthermore, hence, if, so, still, then, therefore, for example, for instance, i feel, kind of, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2145.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 467.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59314775161 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43420073854 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.41755888651 0.524837075471 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 689.4 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.8800907311 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.5 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2272727273 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.68181818182 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238209530026 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100300713422 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.07020660229 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175945514394 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0577677521772 0.0645574589148 89% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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