To gain a promising job, in modern world, is somehow closely linked to the excellent capability to relate well to people in work places-i.e., people at work put a premium on networking than ever before. And this phenomenon makes students wonder whether they should concentrate on training interpersonal skills or studying hard in school. After weighing the merits and demerits of both sides, I am firmly leaning towards the latter.
Firstly, knowledge and skills which students acquires from the school give them a competitive edge seeking a promising future job. Only when they lay a solid foundation of knowledge can they probably accomplish every task well assigned to them in long term. Based on the belief, many companies give paper tests to evaluate how much their applicants know, so if they are not diligent in study, ten to one they could not give correct answers , which reduces their likelihood to get admitted to the next turn-an audition. Therefore, our proficiency in the knowledge of the field we choose gives rise to a greater possibility to approach our dream job.
On top of that, knowledge is the cornerstone used to grapple with problems in daily work; hence, it is generally considered that people who are industrious in school and have a mastery of relevant background knowledge as well as real marketable skills are favored by leaders and bosses. For instance, my brother, a guy who didn’t speak a lot and worked as a computer programmer in a foreign company, once addressed a critical bug that perplexed anyone else in his team. Owing to the credit for tackling the problem and his constantly prominent performance, he was promoted to a high-paying position and everybody was convinced he deserved it. Drawing on his experience,I learned that it is the knowledge you utilize, your capacity for combating problems that could speak for you. But interpersonal skills could rarely be the key tool for you to work out a problem.
Granted, interpersonal skills could be a perfect complement to one’s substantive work capacity;however, as one's performance at work is used to assess the employees values by the leaders, networking could only be a bonus point that could never replace his performance at all. Imagine someone who are flattering his colleagues and leaders all day but could not even finish his basic work, who would cherish him? The truth is that they are considered as sycophants and not enabled to play a pivotal role in any assignment. Rather, only studying hard, having a comprehensive understanding of knowledge and efficiently accomplishing his own job can he truly win people's respect around him.
On the basis of above statements, studying hard in school matters much more than networking. Just like a dish, interpersonal skills-some seasoning, do not create a dish, but knowledge, the marketable skills you have learned at school-the ingredients, could make delicacies.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, so, therefore, well, for instance, as well as, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2456.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 476.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15966386555 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98392306849 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 279.0 212.727598566 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586134453782 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 752.4 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.3273221888 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.444444444 100.406767564 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4444444444 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176651805844 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.058414531503 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0644872119157 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104753428377 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0522170629115 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.57 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 86.8835125448 161% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.