Which way do you think is the best for a student to make new friend. A. Joining a sports team. B. participating in community activities. C. Traveling
Students would share their feels and works with their friends and affected by their behavior. Because of this, finding new friend plays an essential role in the students’ life. Everyone has her/his criteria in finding a friend. I am of the opinion that makes a new friend in the traveling is the best way. There are main reasons why I hold this point of view: Travel magnifies people’s behavior and enable us to realize the best friend. Beside of this, gives more opportunities to know the people and select best of them.
The first point worth mentioning would be that trip expose people to various positions. In other words, students able to consider their friends’ reactions in different situations especially in facing hardships. It is important because people blurt out their genuine behavior in encounter adversity. Some people give up their friends in the hard times and some of them help others. As a result, students get a better understanding of others’ actions in the journey. A prime example from my own experience may shed some light on this point. 10 years ago, I went to the travel with other students from the school. We were unskilled and that was our first individually trip. One of the students has helped others as she could as, she has been kind with people in overtimes and whole the travel. Having a friendly manner has been my vital standard in becoming a friend with someone. Therefore, I started to conversation with that girl, I selected her as my friend, and now we are friend with together until today.
There is a more subtle point we must consider. Travel is the great way to be familiar with numerous people from several cultures and diverse opinions. Hence, in the trip, you get a chance to choose your friend between plenty cases. Therefore, this status allows students to be freer in selecting the new friend. Because they do not compel to be friend with who are not match and have not any similar views. For instance, my father’s best friend is from Brazil. My father made friend with him in his travel to the Brazil. Even though, they do not have the same language or identical culture they can perceive each other excellent.
All in all, if all the factors are contemplated we can reach this conclusion that finding a best friend in the travel is the productive way. Students cannot only sense their friends’ moral during the travel but also they have very candidates to elect their best friend from various places, which they travel there.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 91, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, so, therefore, for instance, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2089.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 431.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84686774942 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57740980973 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542923433875 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 618.3 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.9345422139 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.3703703704 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.962962963 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 5.45110844103 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245250644448 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0743014858238 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0693078035754 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175854482108 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.045476659259 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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