write about some one who is considered as a leader in the world.

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write about some one who is considered as a leader in the world.

Maybe it seems a little weird, but I think that Micheal Jackson is one of the world's leading artists who brought a lot of consciousness and awareness to our world. Micheal was an adorable black boy who loved to song and dance. He used to compose poems and perform for his classmates when he was in school. He was from a big poor family with a lot of brothers and sister. His tough childhood affected his future work and also had a great impression on all the people who loved him and listened to him around the world.

One thing that makes his works unique is the sympathy that he shows in his singing. He sings song about poverty and racism and other awful elements that can be seen in our modern world. He knows that music is like a language between people. He is also aware that he can influence many people so he tries to use his fame as a tool to tell all people that we live in a world full of poverty and racism, let's get together to make a better world for those who live in terrible conditions.
His work is not dedicated just to social problems for ones who live in slums or for underdog members of the society. In some of his songs we can see a deep understanding of political issues at least in US. For example in the song "All i wanna say is that they don't really care about us", he clearly tell to whom who listens to the song that in this world only a small amount of people has the power to control our whole life and all the thing that is important for them is themselves, not our lives and our situations, even though they try to show that they really care about us!

Finally I love his work because beside all the awareness and deep meaning in his songs, they are really happy and joyful. Every time you listen to them, you can feel a warm and jolly sense that spreads through your whole body. It's like he has injected a state of happiness to your veins. It doesn't matter how many time you have listened to them before, they are always new even when you hear them accidentally in the bus or subway you can feel life and freshness that Micheal has given to them.

In conclusion, Micheal is one of the great artists who is known for his great voice and music. His work is special because he sings not only about love and romance, but also about social problems and political issue and that's why I think he should be in the list of people who has changed our lives, near names like Abraham Lincoln and Kennedy.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 194, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...our world. Micheal was an adorable black boy who loved to song and dance. He used...
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...usic is like a language between people. He is also aware that he can influence man...
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Suggestion: don't
...n the song All i wanna say is that they dont really care about us, he clearly tell t...
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Line 4, column 297, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'tells'.
Suggestion: tells
...y dont really care about us, he clearly tell to whom who listens to the song that in...
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Suggestion: Finally,
...show that they really care about us! Finally I love his work because beside all the ...
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Suggestion: doesn't
... a state of happiness to your veins. It doesnt matter how many time you have listened ...
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Suggestion: many times
...ess to your veins. It doesnt matter how many time you have listened to them before, they ...
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Suggestion: that's
...social problems and political issue and thats why I think he should be in the list of...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'if', 'may', 'really', 'so', 'at least', 'for example', 'i think', 'in conclusion']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.208502024291 0.229887763892 91% => OK
Verbs: 0.155870445344 0.158761421928 98% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0748987854251 0.0866891130778 86% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0425101214575 0.046263068375 92% => OK
Pronouns: 0.123481781377 0.0685040099705 180% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.12955465587 0.118717715034 109% => OK
Participles: 0.0161943319838 0.0351676179071 46% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.13600854712 2.67179642975 80% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0323886639676 0.0309702414327 105% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0668016194332 0.0887237588012 75% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0121457489879 0.0209618222197 58% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0344129554656 0.0139019557991 248% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2433.0 2387.08602151 102% => OK
No of words: 464.0 408.028673835 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24353448276 5.86048508987 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.48200974243 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.237068965517 0.338922669872 70% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.155172413793 0.251872472559 62% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.0797413793103 0.174417080927 46% => More words length more than 7 chars wanted.
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0409482758621 0.112833075102 36% => More words length more than 8 chars wanted.
Word Length SD: 2.13600854712 2.67179642975 80% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487068965517 0.524397521467 93% => OK
Word variations: 55.4191974579 59.2087087015 94% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6684587814 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.7777777778 20.5533526081 125% => OK
Sentence length SD: 82.1327779262 48.84282405 168% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.166666667 120.699889404 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7777777778 20.5533526081 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.611111111111 0.644075263715 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.54480286738 144% => OK
Readability: 41.2950191571 45.7405998639 90% => OK
Elegance: 1.10062893082 1.45489161554 76% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240938563623 0.300154397459 80% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.10230487317 0.103427244359 99% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0513714944709 0.0752933317313 68% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.550839643849 0.497263757937 111% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.164835657451 0.151897553556 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0948454162568 0.114077575197 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.066869784089 0.0781384742642 86% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.326918582296 0.336927656856 97% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0881822734057 0.067059652881 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166283451625 0.210909579961 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0665135209889 0.0618886996521 107% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8870967742 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.86379928315 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 8.42114695341 95% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 2.4623655914 244% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.6433691756 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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