You have the opportunity to visit a foreign country for two weeks.Which country would you like to visit? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice.

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You have the opportunity to visit a foreign country for two weeks.
Which country would you like to visit? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice.

I watch a lot of documentaries and movies, and have lot of friends and relatives in various countries. Based upon what I have heard and listened about various
countries, the country that excites me that most is Japan. I want to visit and may be want to live in Japan because of various reasons: how honest Japanese are,
respect for other people feelings, ethical nature during work, how technologically developed and how clean Japan is.

Firstly, the only trait that I want the most in every human being in this world is - Honesty. This is the single most essential quality
of a human being which can make life on earth like a paradise. When I was in sixth grade, my karate teacher told me an amazing story about honesty
in Japan. While visiting Japan for karate tournament, he forgot his wallet in the train. But, when returning back he took the same train and
found his wallet at the same place, when I heard this thing I was like Wow! I wanna visit the Japan, so see and meet them and learn what makes
them this much honest, what is their source of motivation. Granted, Japan is a developed country, but there must be something which motivates
them to be honest. May be, I can visit Japan and learn this thing and can use this to help my country.

Secondly, In-spite of having limited natural resources, devastated by World War 2, being on high seismic zone, Japan has managed to become a developed country,
there are very few countries in this world which can match Japan in technological might. What is the thing that motivated them to do this much?
Is this their culture or is this something that they are tough from their childhood! I want to meet some Japanese and understand this, so that I can replicate same thing in poor parts of the world, so that those country
can also become self-dependent.

I always strive to be a better human being - better for myself and better for other and nature. I think, visiting Japan may help me learn from some of the traits that can help me
achieve this, hence I want to visit Japan for two weeks vacation.

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Average: 4.3 (4 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...arious reasons: how honest Japanese are, respect for other people feelings, ethic...
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...eturning back he took the same train and found his wallet at the same place, when...
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...o see and meet them and learn what makes them this much honest, what is their sou...
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... there must be something which motivates them to be honest. May be, I can visit J...
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...s managed to become a developed country, there are very few countries in this wor...
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...myself and better for other and nature. I think, visiting Japan may help me learn...
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..., visiting Japan may help me learn from some of the traits that can help me achieve this, ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'hence', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'while', 'i think']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.189448441247 0.229887763892 82% => OK
Verbs: 0.182254196643 0.158761421928 115% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0911270983213 0.0866891130778 105% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0287769784173 0.046263068375 62% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0767386091127 0.0685040099705 112% => OK
Prepositions: 0.107913669065 0.118717715034 91% => OK
Participles: 0.0359712230216 0.0351676179071 102% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.38834569195 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0215827338129 0.0309702414327 70% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0815347721823 0.0887237588012 92% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0263788968825 0.0209618222197 126% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0383693045564 0.0139019557991 276% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2079.0 2387.08602151 87% => OK
No of words: 374.0 408.028673835 92% => OK
Chars per words: 5.55882352941 5.86048508987 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48200974243 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.254010695187 0.338922669872 75% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.173796791444 0.251872472559 69% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.109625668449 0.174417080927 63% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0748663101604 0.112833075102 66% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38834569195 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497326203209 0.524397521467 95% => OK
Word variations: 53.1524228683 59.2087087015 90% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6684587814 82% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.5533526081 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5601413684 48.84282405 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.294117647 120.699889404 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.5533526081 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.705882352941 0.644075263715 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 15.0 4.5376344086 331% => There are something wrong with the essay format.
Language errors: 12.0 5.54480286738 216% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 39.3796791444 45.7405998639 86% => OK
Elegance: 1.15833333333 1.45489161554 80% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230031866737 0.300154397459 77% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.124540450204 0.103427244359 120% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0735700255346 0.0752933317313 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.687658728878 0.497263757937 138% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.178937525753 0.151897553556 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0910758800455 0.114077575197 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0549432991568 0.0781384742642 70% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.116818580021 0.336927656856 35% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0765498134805 0.067059652881 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0996513462185 0.210909579961 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0735999993209 0.0618886996521 119% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8870967742 109% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 9.0 8.42114695341 107% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.75985663082 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 10.0 13.6433691756 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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