Young people enjoy life more than older people do
I completely agree with the statement that young people enjoy life more than older people do. Young people are the one who are in their twenties enjoying their life by hanging out with friends, going to disco nights and many more. Older people have already pass this age so they enjoy their life a different way. But I feel younger people are enjoying their life more because of number of reasons.
First, Young people don't have any kind of responsibility on them. They are just focusing on their career and earning for their living. On the other hand, older people have number of people responsibility on them. They would be having responsibility of their children, their studies and lot more. Let's take an example, There is a man who is 23 years old who is living with his family and there is other man who is 33 years old who is also living with his family. The younger man is only thinking about his career. He don't need to think of earning money as his father would be working and taking up his expenses. However older man has to take responsibiliity of his parents, wife, children and their future. He would be paying for all this. So he would be having a lot more tension than the younger man. So I feel younger people enjoy more as they don't have any kind of tension or responsibility.
Second, Young people don't think about future. They are not so mature that they can think about it. They are just living in their present. But older people do think about their future. So young people don't think about savings or what they gonna do with their life. They are frivolous about all such issues. But old people are not frivolous. They would not enjoy in present to save for their future. Young people can think we have a whole life ahead we would save in future for our retirement. But old people have already pass this age. They know their retirement is near so they have to save. This is also an important aspect due to which i feel young people enjoy more.
As older people have responsibility of their children, their parents. They have to be serious for their life rather than just partying every weekend. They also think about their future , their retirement so they prefer working more than enjoying their life. Young people are in the age where they can enjoy living without any kind of tension as they don't have any kind of responsibility and don't have to think about their future. So, i feel young people enjoy life more than older people do.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, as to, i feel, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2021.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 445.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54157303371 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22576183934 2.67179642975 83% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.355056179775 0.524837075471 68% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 625.5 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.2830985402 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 63.15625 100.406767564 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.90625 20.6045352989 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.625 5.45110844103 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.5376344086 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 16.0 4.88709677419 327% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.429408135684 0.236089414692 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.173475330589 0.076458572812 227% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.197644342316 0.0737576698707 268% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.378490913196 0.150856017488 251% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.163537983727 0.0645574589148 253% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.9 11.7677419355 59% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 58.1214874552 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.1575268817 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.46 10.9000537634 78% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 5.88 8.01818996416 73% => Dale chall readability score is low.
difficult_words: 45.0 86.8835125448 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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