young people today could not participate in helping their communities as they were in the past
Since the end of last century, the concept of participating young people in helping their communities has been brought to the public attention. Some people believe that teenagers nowadays do not have enough time to involve in community services; however, others think that they participate in various volunteer jobs. From a personal perspective, the former point of view carries more weight, given that children these days are overwhelmed with plenty of tasks, such as studying, working and technology.
The first and foremost point, young people have been exposed to a fierce competition, so they should study hard to improve their grades. For instance, prestigious schools in California need high GPA to accept students. Provided that high schoolers students want to admit to these schools, they should work as hard as they can to improve their intelligible capacity and achieve their goals. To put it in another way, nowadays young people spend most of their time studying to earn fundamental knowledge, critical thinking and skills to get a lovely career in the future, thus they build up their future with abundance prosperity. Consequently, teenagers do not have enough time to help their communities.
Next, coupled with studying, working is another reason why young people’s time is so tight. For example, children in developed countries are under severe stress, given that they take loan from bank to apply for schools. Provided that they want to earn money for their tuition fees and all other collage related costs, they should work part time jobs in summer. Although involving in the practical life early could teach teenagers to take responsibilities, it could make them anxious and exhausted to do volunteer tasks for their communities.
One final point, the technological inventions, such as the the internet attract teenagers. A good example, in developed countries, such as Canada and the United States, youngsters spend plenty time on technological media as the internet; moreover, all teenagers who access the world web have social media accounts either on Facebook, Instagram and Twitter, they used these account to chat with their friends or tweet on their web-pages, so their social conversation skills are diminished. Therefore, the internet invention has a negative impact on participating kids in communities’ activities.
Taking everything into consideration; without a doubt, young people today do not have enough time to help their communities. It is suggested that schools design learning activities to encourage students to carry out various volunteer roles for their societies.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2225.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45343137255 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90311048867 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55637254902 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 657.9 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.5864719777 48.9658058833 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.882352941 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.82352941176 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.337932077666 0.236089414692 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108879203326 0.076458572812 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0811115635803 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191116229069 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.051597458303 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 11.7677419355 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 10.9000537634 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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