Your city or province has received a large donation of money to improve the education of children. It must choose between spending the money on improvement of early childhood education(for children from ages 4 to 7) and spending the money on improvement of education for older children(ages 11 to 14). Which do you think is a better option?
If a region receives donations to improve education and is faced with the dilemma of either spending it on early childhood education or on education for older children, I would say it is better to fund primary education as it provides the basis for further schooling.
The early years of education are when the most basic of things are taught which are further used in our life. For example, the simple mathematics we learn during our primary years, such as arithmetics, are the core of all other, much more complex topics we would study in our later years. If the concepts are not clear and the foundation is not strong, building upon it would be difficult.
For example, I once came across a video that explained why some people are good at math while others struggle with it. The root cause of this issue was that the students that were absent during their primary classes, found it hard to grasp the topics and keep up with their classmates. These people found mathematics difficult even later on in their life because their basic mathematics was not strong.This implies that the focus on good early childhood education is more important than simply on secondary education and therefore, it should be the first priority in terms of improvement.
In short, I believe that the government should focus on improving the early childhood education system rather than secondary education, as this is the time when fundamental subjects are taught. If students have a good understanding of these topics, it would be easier for them to do well in succeeding years of education.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in short, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1315.0 1977.66487455 66% => OK
No of words: 268.0 407.700716846 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90671641791 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6240311836 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 212.727598566 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544776119403 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 405.0 618.680645161 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.6003584229 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.3087597256 48.9658058833 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.111111111 100.406767564 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.7777777778 20.6045352989 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.55555555556 5.45110844103 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198260810516 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0766964043153 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107522659997 0.0737576698707 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141770989028 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.126338810915 0.0645574589148 196% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 11.7677419355 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.79 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 86.8835125448 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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