In your country, is there more need for land to be left in its natural condition or is there more need for land to be developed for housing and industry? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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In your country, is there more need for land to be left in its natural condition or is there more need for land to be developed for housing and industry? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Every country has to manage its use of its lands. My country is not an exception to this and it has to decide about the function of its lands. In my point of view, since I am from Iran, which is a country that has to advance due to the condition of the modern world, there is more need to use the lands for housing and industry in Iran. I think this way because of the necessity of making job opportunities for adults, the importance of having companies and manufactures in my society in order to make money and rural immigrants' need for a place to live.

First, since the problematic unemployment has caused difficulties in my home country, it is essential to hire people who don't have any career as much as it is possible and it is not feasible unless we have new companies.Unemployment can be really harmful to every single aspect of social living. So if we don't solve this problem, we have to face its side effects such as increasing rates of crimes, mental problems and so on.

Second, one of the ways to create money and become more economically strong is involving in industrial activities. Although there are some other ways to become a rich country, founding new companies could be a huge step toward wealth. Like any other society, Iran has to run businesses to make money and have something to talk about at international levels.

Thirdly, due to the competition for higher professions, rural communities have moved to big cities. Therefore, they need somewhere to settle down. That s the reason why we should use the empty areas for building apartments.

In conclusion, as far as I am concerned, it is better to use empty land in my country for industrial and housing consumptions. I think this way for three main reasons. First, our community has to provide job opportunities for individuals. Second, industrial activities lead to making money. Finally, there is a need for a place to live.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, really, second, so, therefore, third, thirdly, as for, as to, i think, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1582.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 336.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70833333333 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91238753153 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532738095238 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.3162242587 48.9658058833 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.0588235294 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7647058824 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.64705882353 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295290575675 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0946642575503 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0715156980612 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158600735044 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0935077931992 0.0645574589148 145% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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