In your country, is there more need for land to be left in its natural condition or is there more need for land to be developed for housing and industry? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The advent of industry has led to massive deforestation and to cutting the natural vegetation during the last two centuries, all over the world. This has happened in my country too, and the results are negative from various reasons. From my point of view, there is no need for more land for housing and industry because there are many other possibilities to make use of the existent one. I will explain my statement in the following essay.
First and foremost, people's desire of purchasing new build houses has increased considerably lately. However, there are few investors who started to build modern residential places, mostly because they cannot find available land. Anyway, this problem could be resolved if the government would regulate the policy regarding old houses. Generally, most apartments are more than 40 or 50 years old, and consequently they became fragile. In other words, authorities should decide which is the maximum age for a building to stand up. For instance, in Turkey, apartment buildings cannot be older than 50 years. In this case, the authorities destroy the houses and construct new ones, and thus there is no need for expanding the land in order to make room for houses.
To continue with, the industry has unfortunately decreased a lot in the last 30 years. Before this our country was quite developed in many sectors such as clothing, automobile, food industry and so forth. In addition, there were many functional factories, which sadly, are in a deplorable state at the present time. Therefore, if a new business is to develop, someone can buy one of these old factories and start his industry there. For example, there was an old building in my village and a foreign investor bought and rebuild it, and after this he opened a textile factory. Moreover, it offered other advantages for villagers, and many of the could find jobs close to their homes. So, purchasing and re-profiling old buildings and factories, is a viable solution for those who start a new business.
To summarize, land should not be exploited for housing and industry in my native state. This is due to the fact that old apartments should be demolished in order to make space for modern ones and because there are numerous abandoned factories that can serve to new industries.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, consequently, first, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1907.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96614583333 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69324598718 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559895833333 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 603.0 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.1351890953 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.35 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28578912791 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0818164049191 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0885227214852 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184339905048 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.042716152922 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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