Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Entertainment and playing is an important part of our lives as children. Having a so much free time and being exempt from many of adulthood responsibilities enables children to spend a great deal of their time playing. Some believe that playing computer games is a waste of time thus children should not be allowed to play them. In my opinion, playing video games can indeed have a positive role in the development of the character of a child for two key reasons.
First, playing these types of games activates children mind significantly. While playing, they get to experience a large spectrum of feelings such as fear, happiness, confusion etc. This will, in turn, help alleviate some of the pressure that usually exist in children's mind especially at the early stages of their education where they first face the concept of seriousness in a classroom environment. I remember when I was in the first grade of elementary school I had a personal computer which I used to play whenever I felt anxious because of the heavy burden of my homework. That helped me to get more balanced and rested so I could try doing my assignments once again. As you can see, playing video games can have meaningful benefits in diverting negative emotions free one's mind which is of great importance in the turbulent years of childhood.
Second, as surprising as it may sound, video games can actually be a potential source of education and learning. Nowadays, When you play video games you do not merely enjoy playing but rather get exposed to a massive amount of information. For instance, I recently bought a PlayStation 4 video gaming counsel. One of the most popular games That is played intensely in this platform is Battlefield 1. Having a marvelous gameplay and spectacular gameplay is of course among the many strengths that this game has. However, I was particularly attracted to it owing to the fact that it meticulously depicts numerous battles and events of the first world war. Being a huge history fan, playing one of the best game titles available in which a whole fantastic historical period is illustrated is of additional pleasure. I am amazed by all the knowledge presented in that game. As a matter of fact, it has even motivated me to further study world war 1 to get a better picture of the game and that rather obscure period of history. This experience taught me the unexpected role that playing video games can have on educating people.
In sum, though some may oppose, I firmly hold this view that video games might have a constructive contribution to children mental abilities and knowledge. Not only they will give them the chance to reboot their brains or even dispose of undesirable feelings but also they can assist children in further informing themselves. In the end, I think children should not be barred from paying videogames while a limited control over the time they spent on playing will not be hurtful.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, thus, while, for instance, i think, of course, such as, as a matter of fact, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.4613686534 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 5.04856512141 297% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 22.412803532 232% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 30.3222958057 201% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 12.0 5.01324503311 239% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2429.0 1373.03311258 177% => OK
No of words: 501.0 270.72406181 185% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84830339321 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.04702891845 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77184213696 2.5805825403 107% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 145.348785872 186% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540918163673 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 757.8 419.366225166 181% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 3.25607064018 338% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 8.23620309051 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 1.25165562914 479% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 13.0662251656 176% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.4034006317 49.2860985944 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.608695652 110.228320801 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7826086957 21.698381199 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4347826087 7.06452816374 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 4.33554083885 369% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28422979656 0.272083759551 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0897316611709 0.0996497079465 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0964057088437 0.0662205650399 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190342033701 0.162205337803 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0765394812144 0.0443174109184 173% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.3589403974 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 53.8541721854 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 12.2367328918 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 63.6247240618 189% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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