Integrated essay. ETS OFFICIAL TOEFL iBT TEST-4

The reading and the lecture are both about franchising which is a license by famous companies and entrepreneur can use their name. The reading states that franchising company have more chances than starting independent company. The lecturer casts doubt on the point made in article.
First of all, the author of the reading tells us that a huge problem for entrepreneur when they start their bussiness first time is to find good supplier. the reading states that franchising companies have already well suppliers. The point is challenged by lecturer. She asserts that even though these products seem very cheap, they are overpriced. Business owner can not have buy spesific things
Second of all, the author believes that bussiness owner does not have to spend money on advertising because franchising companies has already done and already been famous and known by people. The lecturer rebuts this argument. She states that these advertisements are not for bussiness owner. it is to make well-known for their products. She elaborates on this by mentioning that owner has a little benefit, it has advantage for company.
Finally, the reading says that people who start business with franchising have good rate to be succesful than who start their own business. The lecturer, however, states that this argument is always confusing because there is an another third option which is to buy a company which is already exist business by owner. Furthermore, she says that people who bought company by older have double chances to be flourished than who start with franchising
To sum up, the lecturer effectively casts doubt on the claims and theories made in the article.

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 229, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...nces than starting independent company. The lecturer casts doubt on the point made ...
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Line 2, column 155, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...ss first time is to find good supplier. the reading states that franchising compani...
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Line 2, column 377, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'bought'.
Suggestion: bought
...overpriced. Business owner can not have buy spesific things Second of all, the aut...
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Line 3, column 151, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...anchising companies has already done and already been famous and known by people....
^^
Line 3, column 295, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...rtisements are not for bussiness owner. it is to make well-known for their product...
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Line 4, column 226, Rule ID: AN_ANOTHER[1]
Message: One of these determiners is redundant in this context. Choose only one: 'a third' or 'another third'.
Suggestion: a third; another third
...nt is always confusing because there is an another third option which is to buy a company which ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, second, third, well, first of all, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 12.0772626932 149% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 22.412803532 125% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 30.3222958057 86% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1399.0 1373.03311258 102% => OK
No of words: 272.0 270.72406181 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14338235294 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63842290221 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 145.348785872 92% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492647058824 0.540411800872 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 422.1 419.366225166 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 64.1555055228 49.2860985944 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.2666666667 110.228320801 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1333333333 21.698381199 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.06666666667 7.06452816374 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.3589403974 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.2367328918 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.42419426049 90% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 63.6247240618 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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