A passage with examples of altruist acts of an animal and human are opposed in a lecture( how they are not actually selfless)
The lecture suggest counter points regarding the purpose of an altruistic act. A meerkat who actually stands guard has eaten before, so his stomach is quite full, comparative to other meerkats who are scattered. Also the sentinel meerkat is more safe as he stands near a burrow where he can hide quickly whenever the danger like a predating hawk is near. The other meerkats are in more danger as they instantly have no place to hide. Also sentinel meerkat has an additional advantage. When it sounds the alarm, other meerkats will either group together or run to and fro, which will divert the attention of hawk away from the sentinel and towards the other meerkats.
In case of humans, when they do something unselfish like donate their organs to relatives or strangers, the purpose of doing so is not exactly selfless. The donator, in return, will get some reward, compliment or just self-satisfaction by donation their organs to others. Even though the rewards or aftermath of donating is not material, but it still makes donator feel good. So the donator is indeed gaining some form of profit from his "altruism".
These above points made in the lecture opposes the point made in passage that "Individuals performing altruistic acts gain nothing." In both cases, the sentinel meerkat has gained food and security and humans have gained self-satisfaction.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 213, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ve to other meerkats who are scattered. Also the sentinel meerkat is more safe as he...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...s they instantly have no place to hide. Also sentinel meerkat has an additional adva...
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'regarding', 'so', 'still']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.253846153846 0.261695866417 97% => OK
Verbs: 0.153846153846 0.158904122519 97% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0692307692308 0.0723426182421 96% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0653846153846 0.0435111971325 150% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0384615384615 0.0277247811725 139% => OK
Prepositions: 0.103846153846 0.128828473217 81% => OK
Participles: 0.0423076923077 0.0370669169778 114% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.00960753076 2.5805825403 117% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0192307692308 0.0208969081088 92% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00154638098197 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.1 0.128158765124 78% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0153846153846 0.0158828679856 97% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0269230769231 0.0114777025283 235% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1382.0 1645.83664459 84% => OK
No of words: 226.0 271.125827815 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.11504424779 6.08160592843 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87727950738 4.04852973271 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.37610619469 0.374372842146 100% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.283185840708 0.287516216867 98% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.172566371681 0.187439937562 92% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.110619469027 0.113142543107 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00960753076 2.5805825403 117% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 145.348785872 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615044247788 0.539623497131 114% => OK
Word variations: 63.1210869408 53.8517498576 117% => OK
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0529801325 84% => OK
Sentence length: 20.5454545455 21.7502111507 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.861469078 49.3711431718 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.636363636 132.220823453 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5454545455 21.7502111507 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.545454545455 0.878197800319 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.39072847682 59% => OK
Readability: 48.8640386163 50.5018328374 97% => OK
Elegance: 1.55223880597 1.90840788429 81% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181699054189 0.549887131256 33% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0984102715446 0.142949733639 69% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0673130177153 0.0787303798458 85% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.52698105391 0.631733273073 83% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.184154273558 0.139662658121 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0782520581509 0.266732575781 29% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0496601544016 0.103435571967 48% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.214901858233 0.414875509568 52% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0476083929293 0.0530846634433 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126008102794 0.40443939384 31% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00932460494331 0.0528353158467 18% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.26048565121 47% => OK
Positive topic words: 2.0 3.49668874172 57% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 3.62251655629 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 1.0 3.1766004415 31% => OK
Total topic words: 3.0 10.2958057395 29% => More topic words wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Not in a correct format.
The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%) but more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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