TOEFL integrated writing: Dutch painter Rembrandt

The article states that Rembrandt, the most famous of the 17th century dutch painters, didn't actually paint Portrait of an Elderly Woman in a White Bonnet and provides three reasons of support. However, the professor explains that though the arguments stated in the reading is true, the protrait is actually found to be painted by Rembrandt after thorough examination and refutes each points of the reading.

First, the reading claims that the dressing of the woman in the portrait is inconsistent as the woman is wearing luxurious fur collar which doesn't match with the white linen cap. The professor refutes the claim by telling the fur collar was added later to the painting. She avers that X-ray showed that it was not a part of the original painting. It was added about 100 years after by someone who tried to increase the value of the painting by giving a more formal look.

Second, the passage posits that the face of the woman was illuminated by light reflected onto it from below but below the face is only dark fur collar. This error is not typical of Rembrandt, a master of painting light and shadow. However, the professor explains that this supposed error is not present when the fur collar is removed. Under the fur collar which was added later on, is a light colored clothing which reflected light and illuminated the face. It is very realistic and certainly consistent with the work of Rembrandt.

Finally, the reading says that the painting was done on a panel made of several pieces of wood glued together and no painting known to be by Rembrandt uses this kind. But the professor counters this by explaining that when the fur collar was added, wood panels were also added to make the painting look like more valuable. The original painting was done on single wood panel. Also, the wood of the original painting was from the same tree of another painting by Rembrandt.

For these reasons the painting is indeed one of Rembrandt's work.

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Average: 8.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 88, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ous of the 17th century dutch painters, didnt actually paint Portrait of an Elderly W...
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Line 3, column 141, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...n is wearing luxurious fur collar which doesnt match with the white linen cap. The pro...
^^^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'however', 'look', 'second', 'so']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.25340599455 0.261695866417 97% => OK
Verbs: 0.179836512262 0.158904122519 113% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0653950953678 0.0723426182421 90% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0544959128065 0.0435111971325 125% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0136239782016 0.0277247811725 49% => OK
Prepositions: 0.147138964578 0.128828473217 114% => OK
Participles: 0.0653950953678 0.0370669169778 176% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.36723412261 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0136239782016 0.0208969081088 65% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00154638098197 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.149863760218 0.128158765124 117% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0 0.0158828679856 0% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.016348773842 0.0114777025283 142% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1960.0 1645.83664459 119% => OK
No of words: 339.0 271.125827815 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.78171091445 6.08160592843 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.04852973271 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.318584070796 0.374372842146 85% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.244837758112 0.287516216867 85% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.176991150442 0.187439937562 94% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0796460176991 0.113142543107 70% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36723412261 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 145.348785872 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483775811209 0.539623497131 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 49.5998272737 53.8517498576 92% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0529801325 123% => OK
Sentence length: 21.1875 21.7502111507 97% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.1407036067 49.3711431718 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.5 132.220823453 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1875 21.7502111507 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5625 0.878197800319 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.39072847682 59% => OK
Readability: 45.6712758112 50.5018328374 90% => OK
Elegance: 1.87912087912 1.90840788429 98% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0295829146452 0.549887131256 5% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.171832999745 0.142949733639 120% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0725160664526 0.0787303798458 92% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.679423510308 0.631733273073 108% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.141717970268 0.139662658121 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0185359893764 0.266732575781 7% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0256180127172 0.103435571967 25% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.440513167888 0.414875509568 106% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.132172253202 0.0530846634433 249% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0221496516855 0.40443939384 5% => The content is off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0210075917694 0.0528353158467 40% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 4.33554083885 208% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.26048565121 117% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 3.49668874172 257% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.62251655629 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 3.1766004415 157% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 10.2958057395 155% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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