TPO-17 - Integrated Writing Task
The reading of the passage and lecture are both discusses a fascinating topic pertaining to glass favored buildings, which can harm several birds sometimes because they try to fly over the glass windows. The author suggests three possible solutions prevent injuries of birds.While lecturer casts serious doubt on the claims made in the article and suggests that all three explanations are not very effective to stop this problem.
First of all, the reading article gives a solution called one-way glass. He claims that by replacing this type of glass with regular glass prevent birds injury. In this type of glass, birds can't see through the window and understand that it is a solid barrier, hence not try to fly over it. This point is challenged by the lecturer who says that there is a problem with this type of glass that the glass reflex like a mirror. Furthermore, he points out that if the birds saw sky in the glass, they definitely try to fly through it. Clearly, a disparity exists between the article and the evidence exhibited by the professor.
Secondly, the author thinks that to paint colorful lines on the glass window is another solution for the problem. He argues that thin strips and design on the glass avoid birds to fly through it. This argument is rebutted by the speaker, she acknowledges that this kind of windows includes large opening as opening holes, so the birds try to fly over it. He elaborates on this by mentioning that if designed windows didn't contain the openings then the whole building can't get the sunlight hence, the rooms are too dark.
Finally, the reading posits that by creating an artificial magnetic field help birds away from the buildings. He believes that birds have the powerful electromagnets which help them to show the right directions. The speaker, on the other hand, mentions that birds only use this power when they try to cover a long distance. He puts forth to the idea that when birds migrate from cold to warm weather they used magnetic signals but in short distances, they only used their eyes.
In summary, while both the reading article and the classroom discussion provide interesting information with regards to prevention of the bird's injury, a significant amount of evidence supports that the solutions providing in the article are not very useful. Therefore, the author fails to justify the claims given in the article.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 276, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: While
...ble solutions prevent injuries of birds.While lecturer casts serious doubt on the cla...
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Line 3, column 191, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ds injury. In this type of glass, birds cant see through the window and understand t...
^^^^
Line 5, column 417, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... by mentioning that if designed windows didnt contain the openings then the whole bui...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 468, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...in the openings then the whole building cant get the sunlight hence, the rooms are t...
^^^^
Line 9, column 139, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'birds'' or 'bird's'?
Suggestion: birds'; bird's
...ation with regards to prevention of the birds injury, a significant amount of evidenc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while, in short, in summary, kind of, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 12.0772626932 166% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 22.412803532 192% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 30.3222958057 181% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1997.0 1373.03311258 145% => OK
No of words: 405.0 270.72406181 150% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93086419753 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.04702891845 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49482195047 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 145.348785872 142% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511111111111 0.540411800872 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 593.1 419.366225166 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 3.25607064018 338% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.7914860251 49.2860985944 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.944444444 110.228320801 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 21.698381199 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 7.06452816374 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 4.33554083885 231% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161032713145 0.272083759551 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0584173377457 0.0996497079465 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0374207399104 0.0662205650399 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0940560899236 0.162205337803 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0372452908298 0.0443174109184 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.3589403974 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 53.8541721854 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.2367328918 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 63.6247240618 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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