TPO 24 - Integrated Writing Task
According to the passage, materials inside T. rex' s leg bone are thought to be blood vessels, red blood cells and collagen matrix. In contrast, the lecturer opposes to the claim in the passage, proposing doubts towards the idea.
First of all, it is thought to be true in the passage that branching channels inside revealed by the breaking of leg bone correspond to hollows where blood vessels were once situated. However, the professor puts forth that soft materials were not necessarily the remains of blood vessels. Bacteria which might occupy hollows in bones could also leave behind organic materials.
Secondly, the passage states that microscopic examination of a wide range parts of inner skeleton might show spheres which could be the remnants of red blood cells. Nonetheless, the professor rejects that identical spheres were discovered in other animals within the same areas, which might prove that the spheres were not the remains of red blood cells. It could be the remains of reddish mineral.
Thirdly, a test on the leg bone displayed the presence of collagen, which is a the main component of living bone tissues. Notwithstanding, the professor holds a contradictory viewpoint. She believes that the presence of collagen in a bones of billions of years does contradicts the fact of the time limit of the presence of collagen. It turns out that the collagen found on bones might be from the researcher who was holding it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 26, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
According to the passage, materials inside T. rex s leg bone are t...
^^
Line 7, column 78, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'a' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: a; the
...ayed the presence of collagen, which is a the main component of living bone tissues. ...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 233, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a bone' or simply 'bones'?
Suggestion: a bone; bones
...lieves that the presence of collagen in a bones of billions of years does contradicts t...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, in contrast, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 7.30242825607 14% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 22.412803532 54% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1209.0 1373.03311258 88% => OK
No of words: 239.0 270.72406181 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05857740586 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93187294222 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68577532965 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 145.348785872 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539748953975 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 358.2 419.366225166 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.7654350686 49.2860985944 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.0 110.228320801 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3846153846 21.698381199 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.53846153846 7.06452816374 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.519377636843 0.272083759551 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.167664020849 0.0996497079465 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111875297871 0.0662205650399 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.289337137362 0.162205337803 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0187791803107 0.0443174109184 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.3589403974 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 53.8541721854 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.2367328918 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 63.6247240618 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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