TPO-24 - Integrated Writing Task Animal fossils usually provide very little opportunity to study the actual animal tissues, because in fossils the animals' living tissues have been largely replaced by minerals. Thus, scientists were very excited recently

The reading passage contends that the researchers discovered that the leg bone of a 70-million-year-old fossil of Tyrannosaurus rex have been remained blood vessels, red blood cells, and collagen matrix. On the other hand, the lecturer brings about several points that contradict this argument.
First of all, the lecturer questions the idea in the reading passage that many small branching channels are revealed in the breaking of the fossilized leg bone, which probably correspond to hollows in the bones where blood vessels were once located. This is attributed to the fact that even many channels are found in the fossilized leg bone of T. rex, that is not where blood vessels were once located. It is evidence of bacteria’s habitats. Bacteria are easy to colonize in the bone and make their habitats with hollow. And they are capable to transfer their habitats into soft substance. Thus, the reading passage’s first point is invalid.
Moreover, the lecturer casts doubt on the idea in the reading passage that the presence of sphere that could be remains of red blood cells has been revealed on microscopic examination of the various parts of inner bone. This is because according to a research of other animal, it is impossible to remain their red blood cells. And the sphere might be different substance. Consequently, the reading passage’s second point is refuted.
Last but not least, the lecturer disagrees with the idea in the reading passage that according to scientists’ test on the dinosaur leg bone, it contained collagen. It is obvious that collagen is unable to last for a long period. And it would not be from the bone of Tyrannosaurus rex, from different material such as human skins. As a result, the reading passage’s last point is contradicted.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 249, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...nner bone. This is because according to a research of other animal, it is impossible to re...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'consequently', 'first', 'if', 'moreover', 'second', 'so', 'thus', 'such as', 'as a result', 'first of all', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.304093567251 0.261695866417 116% => OK
Verbs: 0.131578947368 0.158904122519 83% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0964912280702 0.0723426182421 133% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0350877192982 0.0435111971325 81% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0263157894737 0.0277247811725 95% => OK
Prepositions: 0.111111111111 0.128828473217 86% => OK
Participles: 0.0380116959064 0.0370669169778 103% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.97642622854 2.5805825403 115% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0233918128655 0.0208969081088 112% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00154638098197 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.102339181287 0.128158765124 80% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00877192982456 0.0158828679856 55% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0204678362573 0.0114777025283 178% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1793.0 1645.83664459 109% => OK
No of words: 293.0 271.125827815 108% => OK
Chars per words: 6.11945392491 6.08160592843 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.04852973271 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.341296928328 0.374372842146 91% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.300341296928 0.287516216867 104% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.215017064846 0.187439937562 115% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.116040955631 0.113142543107 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97642622854 2.5805825403 115% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 145.348785872 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484641638225 0.539623497131 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 47.3260626909 53.8517498576 88% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0529801325 123% => OK
Sentence length: 18.3125 21.7502111507 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.1954717542 49.3711431718 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.0625 132.220823453 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3125 21.7502111507 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.75 0.878197800319 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.39072847682 29% => OK
Readability: 48.3466296928 50.5018328374 96% => OK
Elegance: 2.34848484848 1.90840788429 123% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.739073325642 0.549887131256 134% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.146813836659 0.142949733639 103% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.127041626949 0.0787303798458 161% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.526224266969 0.631733273073 83% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.18546099158 0.139662658121 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.297098733999 0.266732575781 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.190456100619 0.103435571967 184% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.459555585755 0.414875509568 111% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.046749930582 0.0530846634433 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.573535860984 0.40443939384 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0720987235741 0.0528353158467 136% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.26048565121 235% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 0.0 3.49668874172 0% => More positive topic words wanted.
Negative topic words: 4.0 3.62251655629 110% => OK
Neutral topic words: 7.0 3.1766004415 220% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 10.2958057395 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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