TPO 28 - sec1

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TPO 28 - sec1

The reading argus that Robert Perry has reached the North Pole in 1909 and it provides three evidence about it. In contrast, the professor does not agree with it and claims that it could not have been possibly true.

First of all, The passage mentions a committee that was put together by the National Geographic Society to investigate this trip to the North. Based on Peary's records and equipment's they committee concluded that he reached the North Pole. However, the professor disagrees with this due to the facts that many members of this committee were in fact Peary's friends and had spent alots of money on funding his trip, Moreover, they did not had enough time to invetigate this.

Second, the reading passage says the this trip, in the claimed time, is possible due to the fact that a British explorer named Tom Avery made the same trip in less than 37 days. In contrast, the professor cast doubt on this and mentions that Avery's did not have to carry food and was traveling much lighter and also the weather conditions when he was traveling was much better.

Finally, the reading passage states that some photographs that Perry tool provided strong evidence that he reached the north pole due to the fact that the sun's possition coulde have been calculated by these photos and they were the same as other photos that were taken in the arctics. However, The professor disagrees with this and mentions that the camera that perry used was to basic and to photos were faded. As a results, the shades could not have been calculated truly.

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they committee concluded that
the committee concluded that

was to basic
was too basic

Sentence: The reading argus that Robert Perry has reached the North Pole in 1909 and it provides three evidence about it.
Error: argus Suggestion: argue

Sentence: However, the professor disagrees with this due to the facts that many members of this committee were in fact Peary's friends and had spent alots of money on funding his trip, Moreover, they did not had enough time to invetigate this.
Error: alots Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: invetigate Suggestion: investigate

Sentence: Finally, the reading passage states that some photographs that Perry tool provided strong evidence that he reached the north pole due to the fact that the sun's possition coulde have been calculated by these photos and they were the same as other photos that were taken in the arctics.
Error: possition Suggestion: position

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 10 12
No. of Words: 270 250
No. of Characters: 1254 1200
No. of Different Words: 135 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.054 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.644 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.211 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 75 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 62 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 36 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 21 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.576 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.401 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.646 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.126 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4