TPO 43- Agnostids were a group of marine animals that became extinct about 450 million years ago. Agnostid fossils can be found in rocks in many areas around the world. From the fossil remains, we know that agnostids were primitive arthropods-relatives of

The main idea of both the reading and the lecture is about different theories about the lifestyle of agnistids, a marine animal which became extinct 450 million years ago. Although the reading mentions three evidences about their life, the lecturer finds them so weak to accept and provides three counter reasons to refute them all.

First off, the reading mentions that agnostides may have fed on smaller animals as active free-swimming predators. However, the lecturer denies this idea by talking about the fact that in order to be predator, agnostides should be provided strong vision supported with big eyes. While, according to the agnostide fossils, they not only had tiny poor eyes, but also in some cases, they were completely blind. Thus, in order to be active predator, they must have had some vital organs in their body to enable them to prey on other small animals which no evidence of special body elements has been found.

Furthermore, the reading explains that agnostides might have been seafloor dwellers which fed on dead organisms and bacteria. The lecturer, on the other hand, argues that not only most seafloor dwellers don't have the capability to swim fast,, but also they prefer to stay localized in one small spot. However, according to the fossils, agnostides swam swiftly and were distributed in the vast areas. Being so portable rejects this hypothesis that they were seafloor dwellers.

Eventually, the reading claims that agnostides were parasites which fed on fish or other larger animals. In contrast, according to the lecture, the usual characteristic of parasites is their small population, otherwise they would kill most of organisms in a habitat. Whereas, the agnostides' fossils have illustrated that they were living in large population with great numbers of individuals. Thus, they could not have been parasites.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 204, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...es that not only most seafloor dwellers dont have the capability to swim fast,, but ...
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Line 5, column 241, Rule ID: DOUBLE_PUNCTUATION
Message: Two consecutive commas
Suggestion: ,
...rs dont have the capability to swim fast,, but also they prefer to stay localized ...
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Line 7, column 236, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the organisms') or simply say ''most organisms''.
Suggestion: most of the organisms; most organisms
...l population, otherwise they would kill most of organisms in a habitat. Whereas, the agnostides f...
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Line 7, column 268, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ld kill most of organisms in a habitat. Whereas, the agnostides fossils have illustrate...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, thus, well, whereas, while, in contrast, talking about, in some cases, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 30.3222958057 129% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1562.0 1373.03311258 114% => OK
No of words: 298.0 270.72406181 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24161073826 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57681415171 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557046979866 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 419.366225166 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9544296276 49.2860985944 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.571428571 110.228320801 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2857142857 21.698381199 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0714285714 7.06452816374 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.425177029243 0.272083759551 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155037276788 0.0996497079465 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0745713397914 0.0662205650399 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255585219632 0.162205337803 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101969869269 0.0443174109184 230% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.3589403974 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 53.8541721854 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.2367328918 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 63.6247240618 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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