TPO 46
The lecturer claims that there are several benefits from persuading doctors to adopt electronic medical record system. However, the lecturer casts serious doubt on this claim by presenting counter-arguments and examples. She believes that none of these proofs are convincing.
On the first place, the lecturer contends that reduce in cost is not a significant goal of this strategy due to people never stop using paper also continue their process based on using of its and store them because they need to signature on some emergency letter, therefore it is impossible to interrupt the use of paper. This, however, is contradicted to the reading passage argues that the use of electronic records can help reduce costs by saving money on storing and transferring medical records, moreover, we do not need huge storage space to keep papers.
On the other hand, it is noted in the passage that electronic medical records are crucial to reducing the chances of medical errors. In contrast, She clearly states that most of the doctors do not adapt themselves with this electronic record, thus during the time that they work write everything on the paper and when their work are finished give their handwriting to their employee in order to enter data in the system in addition, because doctors write in fast speed, it is really hard to read them correctly, hence by this advance maybe employee makes a mistake and submits wrong information in the system.
Finally, the speaker points out that it is really hard for doctors to access to patient data thanks to it is confined by some restricted rules beside that even they need to have their patients permission. For example, some people block their user for any purpose which make the inconvenient situation for doctors to achieve with the information that they want. Nonetheless, the note asserts that electronic medical records can greatly aid medical research by making it possible to gather large amounts of data from the patient record.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, nonetheless, really, so, therefore, thus, for example, in addition, in contrast, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 22.412803532 174% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 30.3222958057 168% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1669.0 1373.03311258 122% => OK
No of words: 329.0 270.72406181 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07294832827 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59166625066 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 145.348785872 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550151975684 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 517.5 419.366225166 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 21.2450331126 151% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 117.225253252 49.2860985944 238% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 166.9 110.228320801 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.9 21.698381199 152% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.5 7.06452816374 219% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.496983599334 0.272083759551 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.205011471987 0.0996497079465 206% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.170395246184 0.0662205650399 257% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.283927467602 0.162205337803 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.059284664834 0.0443174109184 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.9 13.3589403974 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 53.8541721854 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.0289183223 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.72 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.42419426049 108% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 63.6247240618 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.498013245 141% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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