The following appeared in a memo from the owner of Green Thumb Gardening Center, a small business serving a suburban town.
"There is evidence that consumers are becoming more and more interested in growing their own -vegetables. A national survey conducted last month indicated that many consumers were dissatisfied with the quality of fresh vegetables available in supermarkets. And locally, the gardening magazine Great Gardens has sold out at the Village News stand three months in a row. Thus, we at Green Thumb Gardening Center can increase our profits by greatly expanding the variety of vegetable seeds we stock for gardeners this coming spring."
a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument
In this memo, the statement emphasizes on the inclination of residents to cultivate their own vegetables. To endorse this thesis, the article’s author notes three postulations 1)because the quality of the vegetables in super market ebbs, people are more partial to foster vegetables, 2) the disseminating the some news based on Great Gardens magazine can be deemed another reason and finally providing the sundry seeds to amplify their revenue is another culprit of this statement. Close scrutiny each of the reasons divulges that none of them lead to tenable conclusion.
Based on the evidence, the lower quality of vegetables during one month and consequently the dissatisfaction of people propel them toward growing their own vegetables. In contrast, this hypothesis underestimates the importance of more time for investigation of malcontent of residents living in area. Accordingly, just one month does not seem plausible to reach this conclusion since the more time is dedicated to consider this problem, the more logical and vigorous result will be obtained. Thus, to achieve the exact reason why people do not desire to purchase the vegetables from markets, the more needed time should be deemed.
Nor does the mere fact that promulgating the Great Gardens magazine’ news for three month sequentially can be another must why the motivation of persons to buy vegetables from markets alleviated. Since, this kind of magazine may encompass some explanation about curative effect of some herbs to suppress fatal diseases which may play as a stimulus for readers to peruse this magazine, therefore, this magazine can benefit from this condition and elevate the number of magazines during three years. Hence, that this magazine provokes people to implant their own vegetables in lieu of buying them from supermarkets does not sound plausible. As it is aforementioned, other elements such as colorful and riveting information about the pitfalls and privileges of various kinds of seeds in this magazine might be captivating for the buyers to purchase it.
Even the allegation of the memo about providing tremendous and different types of seeds can surly assure the high profit is not totally accurate. In fact, in spite of the significance of variety in enchanting every viewer, the equipment and sufficient ambiance to retain those kinds of seeds may not be accessible for all people living in that realm. Thus, only when one dimension of thousand factor is justified, can it be anticipated that this conclusion cannot cause to extravagant revenue for Great Thumb Gardening magazine. Owing to what is specified above, the amenities and special preservative condition also talk first in this achievement, however, the author observe this point through one angle.
In sum, the argument is logically flawed and hence indefensible as it stands. To bolster the conclusion, the author must devote more time than one month to better scrutinize the reluctance of people to buy domestic vegetables, as well as, consider other positive points of Great garden magazine which help it to imprint the magazine successively. The last but not the least, the predominance of regarding the available facilities to grow various seeds for residents should be inserted.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
the arguments are not exactly right on the point.
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Let's analyze the structure of the statement and argue accordingly:
condition 1:
A national survey conducted last month indicated that many consumers were dissatisfied with the quality of fresh vegetables available in supermarkets.
we may argue like:
by relying on the national survey to support its conclusion the argument depends on the assumption that the level of satisfaction locally with store-bought groceries reflects national levels. Yet the owner provides no evidence to support this assumption. It is possible that residents of this town are quite satisfied with these vegetables.
condition 2:
And locally, the gardening magazine Great Gardens has sold out at the Village News stand three months in a row. //
we may argue like:
Perhaps three months ago this newsstand decreased the number of copies it stocks; or perhaps the magazine does not even concern itself with vegetable gardening; or perhaps the only reason for this apparent increase in sales is that other newsstands in town have stopped stocking the magazine.
conclusion:
Thus, we at Green Thumb Gardening Center can increase our profits by greatly expanding the variety of vegetable seeds we stock for gardeners this coming spring.//
we may argue like:
Perhaps consumers are continuing to buy vegetables from grocery stores despite their dissatisfaction. Or perhaps this dissatisfaction is leading consumers to buy their vegetables from special produce markets and vegetable stands instead of supermarkets.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: ? Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 517 350
No. of Characters: 2691 1500
No. of Different Words: 260 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.768 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.205 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.809 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 197 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 152 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 115 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 78 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.211 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.747 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.737 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.289 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.289 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.087 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 313, Rule ID: THE_SOME_DAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'same'?
Suggestion: same
...ter vegetables, 2 the disseminating the some news based on Great Gardens magazine ca...
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Line 1, column 486, Rule ID: CLOSE_SCRUTINY[1]
Message: Use simply 'scrutiny'.
Suggestion: Scrutiny
...e is another culprit of this statement. Close scrutiny each of the reasons divulges that none ...
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Line 3, column 90, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'month' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'months'.
Suggestion: months
...t Gardens magazine' news for three month sequentially can be another must why th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, consequently, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, regarding, so, therefore, thus, well, in contrast, in fact, kind of, such as, as well as, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 55.5748502994 137% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2759.0 2260.96107784 122% => OK
No of words: 517.0 441.139720559 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33655705996 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76839952204 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92565452051 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 270.0 204.123752495 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522243713733 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 876.6 705.55239521 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.965606049 57.8364921388 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.277777778 119.503703932 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.7222222222 23.324526521 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 5.70786347227 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0990506993163 0.218282227539 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0338920672272 0.0743258471296 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0290431690691 0.0701772020484 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.065451788851 0.128457276422 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0303868311168 0.0628817314937 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 14.3799401198 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 48.3550499002 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.197005988 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.5979740519 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.7 8.32208582834 117% => OK
difficult_words: 153.0 98.500998004 155% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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