Do you agree or disagree with the following?
All young adults should be required to do some sort of national service for their country - for example military service or community service.
Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
In these days, when the liberty of options and freedom plays such an important role in people lives might sound extreme if the country or society would require a young to work or to be involved in activities against their will. Personally, I believe that the young adults should be required to do some sort of national service for their country, more specifically community service.
To begin with, I think that it would be beneficial to them to be involved in the community’s life because in this way they can learn to give not just to receive. At the beginning, might be hard for them to obey ...
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