You are here"If you could invent something new,what product would you develop?"

"If you could invent something new,what product would you develop?"


emiku19's picture

By emiku19 - Posted on 21 October 2012

Essay topic: 

"If you could invent something new,what product would you develop?"

Inventions are always welcome any time in any field. If I could invent something new I would invent a cure for cancer,so I will invent a pharmaceutical product that will cure cancer. Here are some reasons for this choice.

First of all I would like to invent this cure, because so many people have cancer lately and a lot of them are dying suffering so much because they don't have a medicine to cure them.

Secondly, because I'm a pharmacist and with my experience and with a lot of study and help this would be the greatest accomplishment in my carrier.

An other reason is that I'm a very sensitive to the suffering of other people specially of the small children.

Last reason but not at least, I like to help others in their need and this discovery is needed indeed. For instance few of my relatives have cancer, one of them has 6 kids.I feel so bad that I can not help them with a medicine to cure them, like I can help filling prescriptions for other patients.

In conclusion we always need new inventions in every field. My invention would be in a pharmaceutical field.Because these so many types of cancers are spread out all over the earth I believe that on top of being the best and the most needed invention on Earth now and for the future it will also be a great accomplishment in my pharmacist career.

Average: 7.6 (9 votes)
Tags
More essays by this user:
Looking for speaking partner/tutor/chat? Join the instant conversation now!
    
Something about you
Choose a nickname and enter at least one ID (Skype, MSN, QQ, ICQ or Yahoo) if you want to be listed!
Registered users only
Loading...
(89 users watching; 1 users on the list)
People online
Nickname Sex L Country Favorite topics Contact

If you could study a subject that you have never had the opportunity to study, what would you choose? Explain your choice, using specific reasons and details. annisak
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. yjc1989 sticky icon
TOEFL Essay: What historical event in your country has had a major effect on your country? smmmmi
How do movies or television influence people’s behavior? Use reasonsand specific examples to support your answer. zeezoo sticky icon
final version.....154.In some countries, people are no longer allowed to smoke in many public places and office buildings. Do you think this is a good rule or a bad rule? Use specific reasons and details to support your position. fardin sticky icon
INTEGRATED LISTEXING/READING/SPEAKING: QUESTIONS 3(Official guide) sheppard
Integrated writing : sugar consumption in USA elma18 sticky icon
121.Some people trust their first impressions about a person’s character because they believe these judgments are generally correct. Other people do not judge a person’s character quickly because they believe first impressions are often wrong. Compare the fardin sticky icon
TOEFL Sample essay : integrated essay from TPO9 TOEFL_writing_master sticky icon
A friend of yours has received some money and plans to use all of it either • to go on vacation • to buy a car. Your friend has asked you for advice. Compare your friend’s two choices and explain which one you think your friend should choose. Use specific ronxyz

Term
TOEFL essay:Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People behave differently when they wear different clothes. Do you agree that different clothes influence the way people behave? Use specific examples to support your answer. sheppard TOEFL
The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. hajarisfahan Independent TOEFL Writing
Should stores and businesses be open or closed on Sundays? Use details and examples to support your explanation. Ekhlass1980 Independent TOEFL Writing
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. Use specific reasons and examples to support your yjc1989 TOEFL
Nowadays, neighbors depend on each other less than the people in the past. Mirin TOEFL
College days are the best days in person’s life: Agree or disagree Lauren TOEFL
Altruism is a type of behavior in which an animal sacrifices its own interest for that of another animal or group of animals. Altruism is the opposite of selfishness; individuals performing altruistic acts gain nothing for themselves. Examples of alt covinfox Integrated TOEFL Writing
Some people enjoy change, and they look forward to new experiences. Others like their lives to stay the same, and they do not change their usual habits. Compare these two approaches to life. Which approach do you prefer? Explain why. anubhav1989 sticky icon Independent TOEFL Writing
Keeping animals in captivity is cruel. There is no reason for zoo to exist in the 21 century.How far you agree or disagree with this opinion? ket2014 Independent TOEFL Writing
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Attending a live performance (for example, a play, concert, or sporting event) is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. Farzin.83 Independent TOEFL Writing

Term
If you could meet a famous entertainer or athlete, who would that be, and why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice. apurva sticky icon Independent TOEFL Writing
Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to so much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? kenny01080108 Independent TOEFL Writing
Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to so much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? kenny01080108 sticky icon Independent TOEFL Writing
Governments should focus its budgets more on environmental protection than on economic development. yichen sticky icon Independent TOEFL Writing
It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay. Farzin.83 Independent TOEFL Writing
Keeping animals in captivity is cruel. There is no reason for zoo to exist in the 21 century.How far you agree or disagree with this opinion? ket2014 Independent TOEFL Writing
Every generation of people is different in important ways. How is your generation different from your parents’ generation? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer apurva Independent TOEFL Writing
Some people learn by reading about things. Others learn by doing things. Which of these methods of learning is better for you? venous Independent TOEFL Writing
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The automobile is destroying our quality of life. venous Independent TOEFL Writing
Some people like to be the leader of a group. Others like to be a member of a group in which another person is the leader. Which do you prefer? venous sticky icon Independent TOEFL Writing

If you could meet a famous entertainer or athlete, who would that be, and why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice. apurva sticky icon Independent TOEFL Writing
Some people like to be the leader of a group. Others like to be a member of a group in which another person is the leader. Which do you prefer? venous sticky icon Independent TOEFL Writing
Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to so much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? kenny01080108 sticky icon Independent TOEFL Writing
Governments should focus its budgets more on environmental protection than on economic development. yichen sticky icon Independent TOEFL Writing
Some people enjoy change, and they look forward to new experiences. Others like their lives to stay the same, and they do not change their usual habits. Compare these two approaches to life. Which approach do you prefer? Explain why. anubhav1989 sticky icon Independent TOEFL Writing
It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay. Farzin.83 Independent TOEFL Writing
Keeping animals in captivity is cruel. There is no reason for zoo to exist in the 21 century.How far you agree or disagree with this opinion? ket2014 Independent TOEFL Writing
a/d? "parents are the best teachers" afaghfarhadi Independent TOEFL Writing
Every generation of people is different in important ways. How is your generation different from your parents’ generation? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer apurva Independent TOEFL Writing
Superpower food -integrated food Farzin.83 Integrated TOEFL Writing
emiku19's picture

Please rate and check this essay like in Toefl IBT EXAM!

essayE-rater's picture

flaws:
No. of Words: 248 350
No. of Characters: 1050 1500
No. of Different Words: 124 200

Write the essay with more vocabulary words.

and don't use one sentence as one paragraph.

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 15 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 248 350
No. of Characters: 1050 1500
No. of Different Words: 124 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.968 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.234 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.592 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 61 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 38 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 27 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 20 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.8 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.253 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.374 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.738 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.107 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5