Some people believe that mothers should not work. Others argue against this. Consider the problems that a working mother faces. Do you think mothers should work.
In the past before the illumination of people, women were the second class citizens in almost every country. They were not working outside and they just were doing home and child care. Although this conception has changed today and women got their rightful status they deserve, there is still a belief in some people that mothers should stay at home and do the home work and bring up their children. In my opinion, imprisoning them at home is not right in many ways that I will mention below.
First of all, almost every women become mother and if we say mothers should not work, it means half of the manpower of the country is idle. With the reforms in people’s mind at eighteenth century, women broke their chains and they started contributing the country’s labor. This provided extra endeavor in the road goes to development and modern life. Also compared to one salary per family that husbands earn, families will have more comfortable life with the mother’s pay.
Moreover, if women are locked up at home, their personel education will stay inadequate and their intellectual ability will not improve. Because the mothers give basic training to the babies, their level of knowledge and wisdom is important for the future of next generations.
Although mothers have some responsibilities like child and home care, these duties can be shared with husbands. Also in the pregrancy and in the first days after giving birth, they may get permission from their jobs for some time enough to take care of themselves and babies. Because, today some jobs do not Grant this right to women, governments should give this privilage to every pregnant woman by enacting a law and guarantee them to keep their jobs.
In sum, families may face some difficulties if mother works, but when husband take some of their responsibilities in home and child care, women would be able to contribute both their family and country. Also governments should carry out policies supporting the women’s fitting into the community.
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Some people believe that
Some people believe that mothers should not work. Others argue against this. Consider the problems that a working mother faces. Do you think mothers should work?
In this contemporary world, the responsibility in bringing up the family is equally shouldered by both father and mother. However, there is a fallacy that the mother should not be a breadwinner. In my opinion, there are some minimal problems which can be handled efficiently to manage a balance between work and life in females.
Admittedly there are some reasons why some people think that the women earning for a family are unnecessary. The main reason for this thinking is due to the old male dominant world. For instance, previously, women were neither given the basic education nor allowed to work outside. After the struggles of various reformers, women gained equal rights in society. Another reason is people have a false perception that bringing up the child and taking care of them is the responsibility of women.
In my point of view, these mild issues can be tackled with much ease. Firstly, both parents have the equal responsibility in nurturing and growing the child. For this a good understanding between couples is crucial and such cooperation will ensure to alleviate the hurdles faced in looking after the children. Secondly, people should come out of the old thinking and should witness the women population excelling in various fields. For example, women have proved themselves as an honest politician and brave soldiers. Finally, women should become more aware of the Women helplines and various NGO’s which are working round the clock to ensure the women safety caused by the public.
To reiterate, I advocate that the women’s contribution in the workforce is really a great support to mankind. Albeit, little problems the scenario can be improved by creating more insight among public especially females.
Sentence: In sum, families may face some difficulties if mother works, but when husband take some of their responsibilities in home and child care, women would be able to contribute both their family and country.
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Sentence: Moreover, if women are locked up at home, their personel education will stay inadequate and their intellectual ability will not improve.
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Sentence: Also in the pregrancy and in the first days after giving birth, they may get permission from their jobs for some time enough to take care of themselves and babies.
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Sentence: Because, today some jobs do not Grant this right to women, governments should give this privilage to every pregnant woman by enacting a law and guarantee them to keep their jobs.
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